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Did You Know?

Did you know The cow was slaughter? Did you know The general touches your daughter? Did you know The colonel lies? Did you know Your son has died?

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Nathaniel Köhp

Date: 7/23/2009 5:28:00 PM

Yeah, Sue is right, this is Free Verse. Odd subject matter displayed almost like a skipping song and with a definite story to tell, however, it's very abstract. I must admit, "the cow was slaughter" irks me, it has mixed tenses and sounds as though "slaughter" was chosen over "slaughtered" to find an easier rhyme. It's not bad though, just as I said earlier, amazingly abstract.

Sue Mason

Date: 7/23/2009 2:37:00 PM

Don't forget the "Form" ... this is Free Verse instead of "I don't Know" ... interesting and mysterious write here ... smile ... Welcome to Poetry Soup, Steve.

Jessica Arteaga

Date: 7/22/2009 9:42:00 PM

what makes you comes up with these kind of topics i wonder if i could ask?