Devour

You're a cannibal, baby, consuming pieces of my heart, chewing on my frailty, and tearing me apart, You're a scavenger, baby, overhead with your eyes honed, peeling layers of my flesh, until I'm bare to the bone, You're a glutton, baby, you're always wanting more, ravenous in your hunger, as if you feed off of the gore, So sink your teeth, the kill is fresh, devour all of me that cares, go on, gorge yourself to death, don't leave anything to spare, 'Cause I'll no longer be your carrion, your helpless carcass prey, that you kill and kill again, just to feast while I decay.

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Sotto Poet

Date: 5/31/2024 3:01:00 PM

Shane, upon request of my dear friend Wen, I am grateful for the opportunity to visit your page and engage with the profound poem exploring the themes of betrayal and toxicity within relationships. The piece eloquently delves into the metaphor of being consumed by an emotionally draining and manipulative individual. Your adept use of vivid imagery, likening the individual to a cannibal, scavenger, and glutton, effectively conveys the destructive nature of such a relationship. The choice of words evokes a sense of desperation and powerlessness, with the repetition of terms like "devour," "kill," and "feast" underscoring the destructive impact. In conclusion, I commend you on your skillful crafting of this poignant poem.

Shane Thacker
Date: 6/3/2024 4:38:00 PM

"Metaphor of being consumed by an emotionally draining and manipulative individual." This is such a perfect description. Thank you, for visiting my page, Sotto. I'm not on the level of you and Wen just yet, but it's a pleasure a part of this community.

Tonye George

Date: 5/25/2024 3:59:00 AM

This is so beautiful, I love dark poems like this. I don't know where I found the humour in it as serious as the poem is. You have written these words with so much emotions and feelings. I could feel the wound of your muse. The exhaustion. It's always good to let go of the leeches so we don't die. Being loved by some people is nothing but death. Great write.

Shane Thacker
Date: 6/3/2024 4:34:00 PM

Thank you, Tonye. You're absolutely right, being loved some people is nothing but death. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/8/2024 1:21:00 PM

This one delivers impact. I really enjoyed the read.

Shane Thacker
Date: 5/8/2024 2:57:00 PM

Thank you so much, Andrea. I appreciate you reading it and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Ink Empress

Date: 5/7/2024 10:35:00 AM

This is beautiful! It has a passionate touch to it and flows like a captivating and powerful song! Perhaps black metal, and this resonates with me! And perfect way tk describe some flesh eating, selfish ones or maybe it can also be perceived in a sensual manner! Especially the opening! Altho ofcourse dark shades flow! I love the ending! Shows strength of you, despite whoever trying their best to bring you down. Narcissists do not like hearing those words! Pleasure reading your work always!

Shane Thacker
Date: 5/7/2024 12:18:00 PM

Thank you, Ink. I'm so glad that you read it and that it resonated with you. The more I read it the less I like the last stanza, as it sounds a bit harsh phonetically. And you're right, the first stanza does sound a bit sensual. That was not my intention when I wrote it, but I love that it can be interpreted that way, as it further emphasizes the intimacy of the relationship.

Krishna Dasani-Thakkar

Date: 5/1/2024 10:04:00 AM

My my! Scary & creepy. But really well penned.

Shane Thacker
Date: 5/1/2024 11:25:00 AM

Thank you, Krish. I'm delighted that you took the time to read it.

Speaks Volumes

Date: 4/29/2024 7:13:00 PM

Gulp....... remind me never to get on the wrong side of you Shane.. You can be ruthless ! Heheheheh I have always said that if a poem makes you feel differently than you did before you read it.. "then it is art". This is art, because it gave me the shivers, and definitely altered the way I felt after I read it. It proves that to be a fine piece it doesn't have to be about fairies and rainbows dripping with honey. Cheers Wen

Shane Thacker
Date: 4/30/2024 3:40:00 PM

Thank you, Wen. It certainly turned out much darker than it was intended, but I'm glad it provoked a response, nonetheless. lol It was a fun write, as I wrote from someone else's perspective. Thank you for always encouraging me to write!