Despair

despair dusts hearts dreary draped in stark pain debris that angst next dresses more hopeless depressed

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/8/2025 10:22:00 AM

hey congrats on winning in one of Brian's contests. I just tried calling you. Let me send you a soupmail.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 2/7/2025 9:46:00 PM

The sad struggle with inner turmoil and despair is portrayed very well, in this masterfully written cinquain. Very best wishes.

Len Gasun

Date: 2/7/2025 7:13:00 AM

You've painted well "despair" in your superb cinquain my dear poet friend, Cay. I love it and enjoyed immensely. Best wishes always. See you and your poetry again soon. Lots of hugs from me.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/5/2025 4:54:00 PM

Sad that this is something that happens to us from time to time but some people live in this situation all the time. Thank you for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/5/2025 12:46:00 PM

great alliteration, Caycay. Hey, I did not get any email from you. Can you send to soupmail?? Here is my email. Maybe you don't have the right one: Wordwarrior55@hotmail.com Also I'm on Facebook if you want to message me there.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/5/2025 5:15:00 AM

Dear CayCay, As I read this, I thought how raw and unfiltered, distilling deep sorrow into a stark, poignant form. I like how the progression feels inevitable yet beautifully expressed. Even in brevity, the weight is heavy, felt, and understood. A powerful piece. Winter Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/4/2025 8:47:00 PM

Great alliteration expressing the angst of depression!

Ink Empress

Date: 2/4/2025 8:23:00 PM

Dear cay cay, this is a very deep and sincere cinquain that flows with how one feels when depressed, and consumed with angst! I love your word choices here and how youv written also "draped in stark pain debris " pleasure reading you today: sending you light always

Eve Roper

Date: 2/4/2025 7:02:00 PM

Such a sad poem, it should have done well in the contest. I was tickled to hear and see you again. hugs my friend it's been a long time.