Laura Breidenthal Poet Rhyme

Depression

Twinges of familiar sadness
Threaten to overpower my very being
Can I truly be unseen?
Perhaps I never wanted them to intervene
Silence is all I can give you now
As I absorb all of my thoughts
They rot in my very soul. . .
They burn me into gruel and nothingness
I feel the urge to sleep
To somehow escape the. . .depression
That is exactly what it is
I cannot escape it
I don't want to try. . .
I guess I want to be alone
Yet somehow my soul is screaming for your comfort
That you never give
I just don't want to live. . .
It can truly be unseen
Somehow I know that is what I want
But not what I expect. . . 
Sad, isn't it?

Low as low can be
I never wanted these feelings
These feelings wanted me. . .

4-29-13


*not sure if this should be a rhyme or free-verse...it's a bit sporadic..*

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Peter Walsh January 20, 2014 at 5:06 PM A heartfelt write Laura ... there are many of us that can relate...xXx ...... just remember life comes in waves and the pessimist in us sees the next trough whereas the optimist in us sees the next crest...

Mustapha Mohammed July 26, 2013 at 11:14 AM This poem spoke to a part of me.Another one that is seeping with emotions that tugs on the heartstrings.

Debbie Duncan June 25, 2013 at 9:11 PM I like this,, thanks for dropping by my Pitch Perfect Dreams ;} you might like my To Be Like You ;} ,,,, you have a great day. I'll have to finish The Black Journal ;}

David Scott June 13, 2013 at 11:36 AM ive already cometed on this write but can relate alot love your poems your very creative and insightful xx dvaidscott

Duke Beaufort May 18, 2013 at 5:26 PM Laura, you have captured the heavy and intense feeling of depression. It is like a black hole's gravitational field--impossible to escape from (without help). You are so gifted a writer that I must always come here to revel in your words. Your line about wanting to be alone but screaming for someone's comfort is so interesting. I hope you have lots of hugs in your life. Here's one from me to you--->[XX].

Kim Morrison May 6, 2013 at 5:07 PM A very strong and very deep piece of work here Kim!

Karen Anglesey May 4, 2013 at 3:52 PM I felt the isolation and the last line is so powerful.

Wayland Bunch May 1, 2013 at 5:13 PM It enters and overpowers. We become one with it, as though it will make us stronger in the end, but that never really happens, just the slow decline of hope, then morality fades. I don't think these words are helping. I enjoy your poem because I understand it and it's well written. Sometimes writing it out does help, and sometimes it seems as nothing will help. I think time heals many things, and love can heal anything. I hope you find peace soon. Thanks for your previos comment.

Poet Destroyer A May 1, 2013 at 9:42 AM it feeds off of us we never want it but it always wants us, a very deep write and wherever this came from in your life your strong enough to overcome it...always~ Linda

David Scott May 1, 2013 at 8:06 AM KNOW WHERE YOUR COMING FROM HERE SOMETHING i BATTLE WITH EVERY DAY iVE PROBABLY MENTIONEDC IN POEMS A STATE OF CONFUSION A ND STATE OF MIND AND OTHERS I THINK THIS IS RHYME BUT COOL NEVER THE LESS LIKE A LOT OF YOUR POEMS THANKS FOR COMENTS ON MINEXXX DAVIDSCOTT

Anne-Lise Andresen April 30, 2013 at 3:30 AM - Heavy thoughts .... depression ....... one who has not known such thoughts do not know how it feels ..... It is "dark" when "light has gone" ...... But "sun" comes back. - A sad but very well written poem Laura, thank you! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)