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Departure

maybe as I walk away you can hear that small creaking beneath my feet no its not the sinking floor or the opening or closing of a door rather what you hear my dear is my heart breaking from pain and fear

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 11/19/2010 4:50:00 PM
How sad must be such a situation. The poem is very well written and your words portray well the desolatiion. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on my poem. Caroline.
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Date: 11/17/2010 6:11:00 PM
deep write Rachel,, liked the ending, enjoyed,..p.d.
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Date: 11/17/2010 5:48:00 PM
Hi Rachel.I found this a beautiful,moving piece.I liked it very much especially how it led to and resulted in your concluding line.A lovely write.Thank you.Love June(S)
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Date: 11/17/2010 4:53:00 PM
Maybe a title might be "departure" Just a thought for this descriptive and emotional piece.
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