Departing

I have thought of this very hard For I have played every card The sunset is coming fast Leaving behind all my past My life with you can not be I will not pay this fee Like the worm that kills the apple The HIV of my chapel When it rains I am clean No more of the obscene And when the sun shines though I have something else to pursue

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/27/2009 1:19:00 PM

Tyler, I would like to welcome you and your excellent poetry to PoetrySoup. Love, Carol

John Freeman

Date: 7/25/2009 10:39:00 PM

Very good rhyming and good story flow, with a determination that you are not your life, but the observer of your life. Meaning you can make the changes necessary, and needed! God, bless Moses

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/25/2009 6:30:00 AM

We read many poems of the struggles people go through where they see no solutions. It's refreshing to read a poem where the author has resolved to make changes in their life. Also like the comparison of the worm to the HIV. Great job, Tyler! Best Wishes, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/24/2009 12:00:00 PM

Interesting work. Sara