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Defenseless

amidst these sullen skies tiny drops stream down pain lashes out atop the muddied ground she sinks within unable to lift herself she tumbles down like autumn's leaves memories piling up buried in the past as years blow by she crumbles in winded gasps time winds down her last breath drawn the storm lifts as darkness falls she rests in the stillness 02/29/2020 pick a title- tristich contest Sponsored by Edward Ibeh #2 Defenseless

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Date: 3/17/2020 10:25:00 AM
Normally, I struggle with any write that lacks punctuation yet I float through your imagery so thoroughly pulsed that I just, with this poem, noticed it is not your style to use it (don't know about always - I haven't any memory.) Another gem as is Soupy praise! Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/18/2020 6:25:00 PM
Thank you so much my sweet friend... good to see you around... hope all is well... hugs and blessings!
Date: 3/10/2020 2:35:00 PM
I felt your defenselessness - your poem is so vivid my friend - this is definitely best for a win. Blessings, Jennifer.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/11/2020 6:40:00 PM
Thank you so much Jennifer... hugs
Date: 3/8/2020 7:43:00 AM
I think Edward will love this Sandra. Great use of metaphors. I have been away for a week visiting Hilo for my granddaughters 8th birthday. It is great to be back reading your Poetry again. xxoo
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 12:00:00 PM
Thank you Connie...I sure hope so.... my first time attempting this form... welcome back...I am sure you enjoyed your time with your granddaughter! hugs
Date: 3/5/2020 7:41:00 PM
WOW, you certainly take one there, Sandra, in fact the poetry is so good, it is scary..
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 11:59:00 AM
wow... thank you Harry for your kind comment :) hugs
Date: 3/5/2020 11:41:00 AM
Like sinking into quicksand with nobody to help you out. You captured the feelings of being defenseless so well. Love the lines "in winded gasps / time winds down / her last breath drawn". Beautiful and sad. I hope this does well in the contest, my friend ~ John
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 11:58:00 AM
Thank you so very much John :) hugs
Date: 3/4/2020 7:37:00 PM
such an emotional piece Sandy, thanks for your mail I hope you are ok, hugs jan xx
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 11:58:00 AM
Thank you so very much Jan :) hugs
Date: 3/4/2020 4:29:00 AM
A necklace of pearl verses beautifully arranged dearest, Sandra. Hugs xxx
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 11:58:00 AM
Thank you so much Demetrios :) hugs
Date: 3/3/2020 4:04:00 PM
Full of emotion complementing the imagery. Best wishes.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 11:57:00 AM
Thank you Juliet... hugs
Date: 3/3/2020 1:50:00 PM
- Deep emotion - I feel she is resting in a sorrowful stillness, Sandra - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/8/2020 11:57:00 AM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise… hugs
Date: 3/2/2020 7:10:00 AM
Sadness flows so beautifully from your pen my friend. I could feel her sorrow and loneliness as she rests in the stillness. Wonderfully written. This is a contest winner for sure.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/2/2020 10:28:00 AM
Thank you so much Chris... not so sure about a winner there are many good ones out there and only 10 winners in the premium contests... hugs
Date: 3/2/2020 2:51:00 AM
Fine work,emotion filled. Nice one Sandra!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/2/2020 10:26:00 AM
Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment :)
Date: 3/1/2020 7:56:00 PM
Oh, filled with sadness. Reminds me of Alice in Wonderland.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/2/2020 10:26:00 AM
Thank you Kim...my muse likes her sadness... hugs
Date: 3/1/2020 3:37:00 PM
nice penning Sandy, good emotion and fine imagery, Blessings and hugs, Gordon
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/2/2020 10:26:00 AM
Thank you so much Gordon :) hugs
Date: 3/1/2020 7:54:00 AM
You did well with this, Sandy. Great entry for the contest. Best wishes :) Hugs
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/1/2020 8:00:00 AM
Thank you so much Charlie...my first attempt at this form... hugs
Date: 3/1/2020 7:29:00 AM
You evoke the storms, winded gasps, buried past--crumbling--defenseless! Well done my friend. All the best, Sandy.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/1/2020 7:59:00 AM
Thank you Vijay...I had never seen this form before so I hope I did it correctly... hugs
Date: 2/29/2020 11:55:00 PM
Volumes here, bittersweet, --well said, Sandra, Best wishes -- Aloha!~@wk
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Sandra Adams
Date: 3/1/2020 7:58:00 AM
thank you so much William :) hugs

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