Sandra Adams Poet Tristich

Defenseless

amidst these sullen skies
tiny drops stream down
pain lashes out

atop the muddied ground
she sinks within
unable to lift herself

 she tumbles down
like autumn's leaves
memories piling up

buried in the past
as years blow by
she crumbles

in winded gasps
time winds down
her last breath drawn

the storm lifts
as darkness falls
she rests in the stillness

02/29/2020

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#2 Defenseless

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CayCay Godwin March 17, 2020 at 10:25 AM Normally, I struggle with any write that lacks punctuation yet I float through your imagery so thoroughly pulsed that I just, with this poem, noticed it is not your style to use it (don't know about always - I haven't any memory.) Another gem as is Soupy praise! Poetry hugs ... CayCay Sandra Adams March 18, 2020 at 6:25 PM Thank you so much my sweet friend... good to see you around... hope all is well... hugs and blessings!

Jennifer Proxenos March 10, 2020 at 2:35 PM I felt your defenselessness - your poem is so vivid my friend - this is definitely best for a win. Blessings, Jennifer. Sandra Adams March 11, 2020 at 6:40 PM Thank you so much Jennifer... hugs

Connie Marcum Wong March 8, 2020 at 7:43 AM I think Edward will love this Sandra. Great use of metaphors. I have been away for a week visiting Hilo for my granddaughters 8th birthday. It is great to be back reading your Poetry again. xxoo Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 12:00 PM Thank you Connie...I sure hope so.... my first time attempting this form... welcome back...I am sure you enjoyed your time with your granddaughter! hugs

Harry Horsman March 5, 2020 at 7:41 PM WOW, you certainly take one there, Sandra, in fact the poetry is so good, it is scary.. Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 11:59 AM wow... thank you Harry for your kind comment :) hugs

John Watt March 5, 2020 at 11:41 AM Like sinking into quicksand with nobody to help you out. You captured the feelings of being defenseless so well. Love the lines "in winded gasps / time winds down / her last breath drawn". Beautiful and sad. I hope this does well in the contest, my friend ~ John Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 11:58 AM Thank you so very much John :) hugs

Jan Allison March 4, 2020 at 7:37 PM such an emotional piece Sandy, thanks for your mail I hope you are ok, hugs jan xx Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 11:58 AM Thank you so very much Jan :) hugs

Demetrios Trifiatis March 4, 2020 at 4:29 AM A necklace of pearl verses beautifully arranged dearest, Sandra. Hugs xxx Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 11:58 AM Thank you so much Demetrios :) hugs

Juliet Ligon March 3, 2020 at 4:04 PM Full of emotion complementing the imagery. Best wishes. Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 11:57 AM Thank you Juliet... hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen March 3, 2020 at 1:50 PM - Deep emotion - I feel she is resting in a sorrowful stillness, Sandra - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Sandra Adams March 8, 2020 at 11:57 AM Thank you so much Anne-Lise… hugs

Chris Green March 2, 2020 at 7:10 AM Sadness flows so beautifully from your pen my friend. I could feel her sorrow and loneliness as she rests in the stillness. Wonderfully written. This is a contest winner for sure. Sandra Adams March 2, 2020 at 10:28 AM Thank you so much Chris... not so sure about a winner there are many good ones out there and only 10 winners in the premium contests... hugs

Rercy Zola-Zaba March 2, 2020 at 2:51 AM Fine work,emotion filled. Nice one Sandra! Sandra Adams March 2, 2020 at 10:26 AM Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment :)

Kim Rodrigues March 1, 2020 at 7:56 PM Oh, filled with sadness. Reminds me of Alice in Wonderland. Sandra Adams March 2, 2020 at 10:26 AM Thank you Kim...my muse likes her sadness... hugs

Gordon Mcconnell March 1, 2020 at 3:37 PM nice penning Sandy, good emotion and fine imagery, Blessings and hugs, Gordon Sandra Adams March 2, 2020 at 10:26 AM Thank you so much Gordon :) hugs

Charles Messina March 1, 2020 at 7:54 AM You did well with this, Sandy. Great entry for the contest. Best wishes :) Hugs Sandra Adams March 1, 2020 at 8:00 AM Thank you so much Charlie...my first attempt at this form... hugs

Vijay Pandit March 1, 2020 at 7:29 AM You evoke the storms, winded gasps, buried past--crumbling--defenseless! Well done my friend. All the best, Sandy. Sandra Adams March 1, 2020 at 7:59 AM Thank you Vijay...I had never seen this form before so I hope I did it correctly... hugs

William Kelii Kekaula February 29, 2020 at 11:55 PM Volumes here, bittersweet, --well said, Sandra, Best wishes -- Aloha!~@wk Sandra Adams March 1, 2020 at 7:58 AM thank you so much William :) hugs