Deceit

The traditional Cinquain. A poem, I'm sure, everyone can relate to. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Deceit Is like a knife Opening up your heart And causing it to hemorrhage Always. Deceit Can scar your soul Leaving you defenseless Against a world full of vicious Tyrants. Deceit Is a sick joke That is played upon you And you never see it coming Ever. Deceit Will drive you mad And make you scream in pain You will never trust anyone Again. Dawn D. Kilby Copyright ©2008 Dawn D. Kilby

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Date: 11/1/2008 2:33:00 PM

The repetition of the first line in each stanza strengthens and connects your thoughts. Deceit sure can be destructive. Interesting use of this form. Keep on writing. Karen

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 10/26/2008 5:05:00 AM

I like the flow of this series and how the word is defined in many different ways. I like the denotative and the connotative spin on the word. This is very creative and informative. Great job! ~Joseph

Dawn Kilby

Date: 10/23/2008 8:31:00 AM

thanx sharon :P the traditional form is easier to write than the modern :P

Dawn Kilby

Date: 10/23/2008 8:31:00 AM

thanx deneed :P

Deneen White

Date: 10/18/2008 3:22:00 PM

this is a painful but truthful write I m sorry, believe me, I have been there and done that, great write, I hope that things get better for you, take care D-ncye

Sharon Winter

Date: 10/16/2008 2:59:00 PM

Wow. I have trouble doing one. Sounds like you have not had a very good experience. Guess we all go through it at one time or another, even on and off. Yes, well captured, in fact you have nailed it. Deceit has taught me not to trust, and sadly, it is a good thing. You will know when you can trust someone, after time, but most people have one thing they care about most, themselves. Sad lesson in life to learn. Time helps you sort out. Good luck. Love, Shar