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Death Do Us Part

hope lies slit wrist not much tight twist~ twitch finger missed kiss~~ guilty little witchy miss~~~ long run nothing there cold breath steaming stare thought you've always known never cared busy phone times gone bye bye no regrets we die --- --- V -- -- l l L L v v ****the shape is Supposed to be of two lovers dancing!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 12/24/2011 6:48:00 PM
awesome creation,,hope you have a great christmas,,and new year................
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Date: 11/28/2011 11:27:00 PM
Hey, what's up???
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Date: 8/8/2011 6:53:00 PM
That's sad.... But well written and I like the shape :)
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Date: 7/26/2011 2:55:00 PM
a beautiful sway of a dance, JS.. i see the feet, right?... a puzzling,poignant write, wow! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 7/25/2011 10:50:00 PM
hmmm, it seems a bit gruesome. Did I read it right? I guess I am not good at seeing shapes.To me not much like dancers. maybe it's the way my screen shows it. Wanted to say hi to you and thanks for your welcome comments. Sorry my time is so short these days and I can't even get around to that one list yet. WHen my life is back to normal, joey. and I sure hope that will be soon!!
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Date: 7/25/2011 2:15:00 PM
Joey, Dad and I saw that Miami Heat game around Christmas time in 2008. Dad had a stroke on New Year's Day and died six days later. I really am glad I was able to share that game with him, regardless of whether or not I enjoy basketball I always had fun watching games with Dad. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/25/2011 1:46:00 PM
Yes, I can see the shape, Joey. Love can be like a dance sometimes -- pushing and pulling our partners. There's a lot that lies beneath the surface of this poem. Well done! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/25/2011 10:36:00 AM
a wonderful write JS and fine depiction of the lovers .. shadowy silhouettes luv.. much to ponder here in these lovely lines..
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