Death

the last breath I take
as my soul leaves my body
endless sleep begins

deathsenryu

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Poet Destroyer A

January 19, 2014 at 6:30 PM

Dave, , A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@

Charles Henderson

January 18, 2014 at 9:43 AM

The poem is very good. May I critique it in soup mail. Welcom to the soup by the way. I have been here 4 years

Dr.Ram Mehta

January 18, 2014 at 8:26 AM

I enjoyed the meaningful write, Dave

Skat A

January 18, 2014 at 8:15 AM

Good morning Dave, wow! You just made an endless sound like paradise. One of the best Senryu I've ever read. Giving you a top 7 for your first poem. The senryu is excellent for the readers!! A nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* SKAT