Elis Artis Poet Rhyme

Dear Younger Me

Growing up brings some drastic change
makes it hard to breathe like a cracked rib cage
life becomes filled with lasting pains
everything seems vague at this stage
people become complex not even Patrick Jane 
can read them
you think growing up means more freedom 
but it’s quite the opposite
more responsibilities and it’s pretty hard to get
rid of old habits and passed old vision of things 
problems pile up and you’re given no time to think

You're probably having problems with bae
just hit pause for some days, take a little break
ignore the "I should've's/she should've's" games
just try to work it out no matter whose fault it is
better days are yet to come, just be optimistic

Don't do anything stupid, please wait
just wait, you've waited enough
it's so close, please don't give up
I know how you feel, it's too much
you probably think this is nonsense
but it's going to be fine, I promise



11/1/2015
ELIS ARTIS

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Skat A November 28, 2015 at 1:44 PM Nice win

Richard Lamoureux November 27, 2015 at 7:49 AM I'm glad to see this one on the winners list! Congratulations. Elis Artis December 2, 2015 at 6:22 PM Thank you so much, dear Richard:) I appreciate it

Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 26, 2015 at 3:42 AM Congrats on ur win with this lovely poem Elis.. great work!

Kim Merryman November 11, 2015 at 4:18 PM Congrats on your win, Elis! Love, Kim

Skat A November 10, 2015 at 12:02 PM nice win Elis Artis November 10, 2015 at 1:11 PM Thank you:)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma November 8, 2015 at 10:23 PM Superb win Elis with this awesome write... big congrats! Elis Artis November 9, 2015 at 8:25 AM Thank you so much Dr. Upma:) I really appreciate that

James Inman November 8, 2015 at 9:38 AM Elis, nice write from a little different perspective. Elis Artis November 9, 2015 at 8:26 AM Thank you so much, I appreciate that

Alexis Y. November 7, 2015 at 7:40 PM Elis, you penned some good sound advice. I enjoyed the honest approach that you gave to your younger self.Congratulations on your 2nd place win. Thanks for participating in my contest:-) Alexis Elis Artis November 7, 2015 at 8:16 PM Thank you so much, it's been a pleasure! I'm looking forward to participating in your future contests:) Thank you for stopping by:)

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores November 7, 2015 at 7:01 PM Congratulations in your win. Elis Artis November 7, 2015 at 7:38 PM Thank you so much:)

Skat A November 7, 2015 at 4:24 PM Ellis, nice win. SKAT Elis Artis November 7, 2015 at 6:29 PM Thank you so much dear Skat:) I appreciate that

Scott Thirtyseven November 6, 2015 at 10:59 PM Nice words to your younger self. Some of those mistakes and anxieties made you who you are today, and to be able to write words like these, that makes you pretty great. Well done. Elis Artis November 7, 2015 at 12:23 PM Truuuue! What we go through is what makes us who we are. Thank you so much, dear scott for stopping by:) I really appreciate that

Gary Bateman November 6, 2015 at 12:57 PM Hello Elis!! You commented on one of my poems and so I thought I would drop by to check out your site. By the way, it looks like your really new to Poetry Soup. On that note, I would like to welcome you to our site and the poetry association!! About your poem: First, Good Luck in the Contest!! Second, Growing up is a very tough experience at times. Your very positive attitude shines through here!! Third, Very Well-Done!! A "7"!! Cheers and Best, Gary Elis Artis November 7, 2015 at 12:16 PM You're right, it's indeed a tough experience. Thank you so much, dear Gary for stopping by and commenting on this piece:)

Paul Callus November 5, 2015 at 11:01 AM We do try to encourage our younger ones with advice which has been gained through the years; we would prefer it were they not to repeat the same mistakes which we made! ~ A good poem with sense; well presented. gl in the contest. // paul Elis Artis November 5, 2015 at 6:20 PM Exactly:) Thank you so much for stopping by:)

Poet Destroyer A November 4, 2015 at 10:48 PM oh how true this is, being a kid you never really think about the responsibility that comes with being an adult, thank you for sharing ~Luv Linda Elis Artis November 5, 2015 at 6:19 PM Thank you so much for stopping by, dear Linda:)

Andrea Dietrich November 4, 2015 at 8:03 PM Nicely done, Elis! Good luck in the contest. Elis Artis November 5, 2015 at 6:18 PM Thank you so much, dear Andrea:) I appreciate that

Richard Lamoureux November 2, 2015 at 7:48 AM This is one of your best Elis! Elis Artis November 3, 2015 at 7:08 AM Thank you so much, dear Richard:) I appreciate that

Charmaine Chircop November 1, 2015 at 10:13 PM Love the positive attitude in your poem. Wise words said. Welcome to ps. Elis Artis November 3, 2015 at 7:09 AM Thank you so much, dear Charmaine:) God bless you and keep you safe