Daydreamer

Enthralled by mystic notions
Lights on, but no one there
Her spirit within the oceans
Challenging reality’s square

Four corners could never keep her
Safe and sound inside
Too much, a daytime dreamer
To stay within the lines

Not a sound was heard by others
Still, she swayed with grace
Her thoughts became her lovers
Adorning an abandoned place

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Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/29/2018 9:08:00 PM

"Inside" does not rhyme with "lines'; consider, "Where safe and sound assigns"?

Anna Hopper
Date: 4/30/2018 8:02:00 PM

Thanks for the feedback and yes, your version sounds lovely. I was not looking for a perfect rhyme though. Just a nice flow.