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Dawning of Day

Shadows sway in fertile fields sunlight seduces day- slug slipping down windowpane.

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Joe Maverick

Date: 6/23/2019 12:42:00 PM

Hi Allan, I think this quite effective in its pictorial Output, lovley write on the fauna of creation Consise and powerful.'

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 5/26/2019 6:44:00 PM

Allen, this like your other haiku pieces reflect your mastery of haiku! I am a fan and this is another fave! BRAVO! Hugs. Pandita

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/24/2019 9:26:00 PM

I LOVE this. Is it for Dear Heart's contest?. I hope she loves it too

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.
Date: 5/24/2019 10:46:00 PM

Thank you Andrea

Warren Doll

Date: 5/24/2019 4:59:00 PM

Great imagery, Allen. The slug is a great touch to your haiku, Best Wishes~ Warren

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.
Date: 5/24/2019 7:54:00 PM

Thank you Warren

Hilo Poet

Date: 5/24/2019 3:30:00 PM

Don't see slugs, nor fields, as that is the life when one lives in the heart of town allen, Aloha wk

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/24/2019 5:13:00 PM

(continue) albeit, fortunate that whence in their company, their numbers have not overwhelmed me, but has been a lifetime of a tolerable few--but never on a window allen, Aloha wk

Hilo Poet
Date: 5/24/2019 5:12:00 PM

When I lived out in the country, slugs are a-dime-a-dozen, evidences of a glistening trail, climbing our exterior walls, whereto, I find them intriguing slothful creatures, 'tis unfortunate that they would linger at our town's outskirts and venture back to the tranquilness and wide open spaces of a country setting, tho' 'tis understandable,

Allen Beilschmidt Sr.
Date: 5/24/2019 3:48:00 PM

fortunate or not William? Which?