Dawning of Day

Shadows sway in fertile fields sunlight seduces day- slug slipping down windowpane.
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Maverick Avatar
June 23, 2019 at 12:42 PM
Hi Allan, I think this quite effective in its pictorial Output, lovley write on the fauna of creation Consise and powerful.'
Sietesantos Avatar
May 26, 2019 at 6:44 PM
Allen, this like your other haiku pieces reflect your mastery of haiku! I am a fan and this is another fave! BRAVO! Hugs. Pandita
Dietrich Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 9:26 PM
I LOVE this. Is it for Dear Heart's contest?. I hope she loves it too
Beilschmidt Sr. Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 10:46 PM
Thank you Andrea
Doll Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 4:59 PM
Great imagery, Allen. The slug is a great touch to your haiku, Best Wishes~ Warren
Beilschmidt Sr. Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 7:54 PM
Thank you Warren
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 3:30 PM
Don't see slugs, nor fields, as that is the life when one lives in the heart of town allen, Aloha wk
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 5:13 PM
(continue) albeit, fortunate that whence in their company, their numbers have not overwhelmed me, but has been a lifetime of a tolerable few--but never on a window allen, Aloha wk
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 5:12 PM
When I lived out in the country, slugs are a-dime-a-dozen, evidences of a glistening trail, climbing our exterior walls, whereto, I find them intriguing slothful creatures, 'tis unfortunate that they would linger at our town's outskirts and venture back to the tranquilness and wide open spaces of a country setting, tho' 'tis understandable,
Beilschmidt Sr. Avatar
May 24, 2019 at 3:48 PM
fortunate or not William? Which?
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