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nine unrhymed couplets to create a cloud gathering

in thirteen syllables unlucky for some

Grey clouds the innocent sky ambushing light turns dark stumbling over a tombstone opening up cold graves When eyes become frozen behind scenes in hidden truth as a weight deadens upon the shoulders without hope A ghost from past experience consumes the present and golden sands blacken beneath your feet fallen one Deep undercurrents strains awaken in the ocean Invisible cloaked dagger pierces without mercy I pray waters calming find peace in this mortal frame as the whirlpool of desires casts an ominous spell Upon the sea of life Satanic storms enter Hell and exudes within the malevolent clouds failure Forgiveness stands at the crossroads beholden no more within promise of a dream transparent through the rain As yellow moonlight draws one pathway clearly cutting brings you safely home to love under a fragile roof Under black currents of loss when the heart returns beat in the last teardrop sorrow remained faithfully loved A Collaborated Poem written by Liam Mc Daid and Red Firey

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 6/3/2016 12:15:00 PM
Liam this is terrific!!!!!!! The descriptions are rock solid and can easily shake the foundation of many poets here in the Soup.This is the kind of poetry I hope to write some day.
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Date: 6/5/2016 9:36:00 PM
Thank you Miraj :) Liam is a great poet and I got to learn a lot from him..Cheers ~ Red
Date: 6/3/2016 9:14:00 AM
Hi Liam!:))Wow!Wow!Wow!This is the most very beautiful,romantic,tender,sweet,passionate n' captivating love poem,you've written here my dearest friend Liam.Just dazzling!All so very beautifully written.Just awesome!Another very beautiful,sparkling diamond from your very golden glowing pen.I love it!A most very beautiful, heartfelt,romantic,dreamy,heart melting away enchanting love poem to be held very close to my heart.smiling.This is so very beautiful n' sweet!Just amazing!So wonderful!I truly enjoy it!A true glowing golden gem!Just beautiful!Outstanding poem.Your pen is truly mighty golden!A 7 + + + + +!A Fav!To me you're always the best in everything Liam.So very beautiful,romantic,gentle and sweet.I really hope n' pray you're okay in everything, Liam.Please keep positive.Always keeping you in my thoughts n' prayers.Keep your faith!Keep your love hopes n' follow your dreams always too:))Wishing you a very lovely weekend!In His light God bless you always!:)Love n' hugs!xoxox D.^O^
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Date: 6/3/2016 6:39:00 AM
Ooh so very well descriptive and powerfully done. :)
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