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Damocles Condemned

Swords Drawn Swiftly From tarnished Sheaths of bulbous flesh Transforms pain into audible Snippets of abhorrent venom sired by taut tongues.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/27/2011 4:54:00 PM

Checking out this Fibonacci form you have used here,John. Love that fifth line down. And what an effective last line to it! Thanks again for your contest!

Fathima Dawood

Date: 1/26/2011 10:30:00 PM

Wow!!! well written my friend, took my breath away reading it!!! Peace Always Fathima

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 1/13/2011 6:19:00 AM

Good morning, John.:) "Judge no one as happy until his life is over". The sharp sword of the antagonist, likened to daggers of calumny; hopefully not used afterwards as their dinner-knives. This piece throws my brain into overdrive. Hugs and Peace to you and yours! Love, Mikki

Michael Jordan

Date: 12/31/2010 4:51:00 PM

Hi John, I see the master has not missed a lick - excellent as always. Thanks for the birthday wish John and please forgive the time it has taken me to reply - I have had health and other personal issues to deal with - I want to wish you a Happy New Year John, your friend mj

Rick Parise

Date: 12/28/2010 7:20:00 PM

WOW~great imagery~great work~i wrote a little limerick for your contest(Happily ever after)~but,not in time!!!~I missed out~rick

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 12/20/2010 11:36:00 AM

Very apt form of Fibonacci you have chosen to express, John

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 12/19/2010 7:57:00 PM

A wonderful well penned write. Wishing you and your family a very Merry Christmas and Best wishes in the New Year. God Bless Phyl

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 12/19/2010 6:16:00 PM

John..WOW .. u have outdone your creativity with this vibrant and visual poem and the use of this form.. it is quite brilliant my friend and adore the use of your lingering lines in the mind.. powerful portrait in words John... with luv.. wishing u the happiest holiday season full of richest blessings and joys from Ron and Me to u and yours..with luv..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/19/2010 5:56:00 PM

Interesting work..I am glad that I stopped by this one this eve..The tongue is a mighty sword for sure...Sara