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Cruel Ballet

An open window frames a scene Compelled obsession’s wistful sway A metaphor imbues my dream Entranced a moth, in porch lights gleam Around it flits, a cruel ballet An open window frames a scene With you at night, the same routine Your heart within a glass display A metaphor imbues my dream Unaware the faux flame's scheme A driven urge the moth replays An open window frames a scene With fettered will and pull extreme Your gravity of soul persuades A metaphor imbues my dream The glass I stroke as slumber weans In crushing heat I fall away An open window frames a scene A metaphor imbues my dream

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/23/2016 4:59:00 AM
I enjoyed your metaphor and love the title. Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Brian Strand's contest.
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Date: 1/6/2015 11:33:00 AM
This was just GORGEOUS to read. You have a great talent! I'm really enjoying reading your work.
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Date: 11/19/2014 4:30:00 PM
Well done Villanella Dave. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 11/18/2014 9:58:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Dave, and I love the form...it flowed perfectly. Congrats on a wonderful win! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 11/18/2014 11:58:00 AM
beautifully expressed many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 11/17/2014 8:36:00 PM
Stunning. An intelligent decision challenging yourself with a restrictive form like the Villanelle. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Just a wonderful read for me, one I enjoyed.
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Date: 11/17/2014 8:01:00 PM
Congrats David, and with Villanelle no less. wonderfully done with that tricky form
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Date: 11/17/2014 6:53:00 PM
Congrats on a great win David
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Date: 11/12/2014 3:46:00 PM
wow, quite ambitious doing the poem in villanelle form. I love the shorter lines you used. WEll done!!! Love how you made it metaphorical as well.
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Date: 11/12/2014 3:04:00 PM
Excellently expressed villanelle, David. You paint the moth's dancing routine with flowing ease. Much enjoyed! // paul
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Date: 11/12/2014 7:17:00 AM
extremely well expressed... the drifting of the moth comes out very well with your words. david.. huggs
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