Cruel Ballet

An open window frames a scene        
Compelled obsession’s wistful sway
A metaphor imbues my dream

Entranced a moth, in porch lights gleam
Around it flits, a cruel ballet
An open window frames a scene

With you at night, the same routine
Your heart within a glass display
A metaphor imbues my dream

Unaware the faux flame's scheme
A driven urge the moth replays
An open window frames a scene

With fettered will and pull extreme 
Your gravity of soul persuades
A metaphor imbues my dream

The glass I stroke as slumber weans 
In crushing heat I fall away  
An open window frames a scene
A metaphor imbues my dream
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Smith-Johnsen Avatar
December 23, 2016 at 4:59 AM
I enjoyed your metaphor and love the title. Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Brian Strand's contest.
Poetry Avatar
January 6, 2015 at 11:33 AM
This was just GORGEOUS to read. You have a great talent! I'm really enjoying reading your work.
Meier-Hans Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 4:30 PM
Well done Villanella Dave. Congratulations on your win.
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 9:58 PM
Beautiful poem, Dave, and I love the form...it flowed perfectly. Congrats on a wonderful win! Hugs, Rhonda
Allison Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 11:58 AM
beautifully expressed many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Yvonne Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 8:36 PM
Stunning. An intelligent decision challenging yourself with a restrictive form like the Villanelle. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Just a wonderful read for me, one I enjoyed.
Lawless Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 8:01 PM
Congrats David, and with Villanelle no less. wonderfully done with that tricky form
May Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 6:53 PM
Congrats on a great win David
Dietrich Avatar
November 12, 2014 at 3:46 PM
wow, quite ambitious doing the poem in villanelle form. I love the shorter lines you used. WEll done!!! Love how you made it metaphorical as well.
Callus Avatar
November 12, 2014 at 3:04 PM
Excellently expressed villanelle, David. You paint the moth's dancing routine with flowing ease. Much enjoyed! // paul
Onclaud Avatar
November 12, 2014 at 7:17 AM
extremely well expressed... the drifting of the moth comes out very well with your words. david.. huggs
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