Creature In the Night

Where cold stars exist in the dark,
serene winds whisper to trees
and scarce human ears can listen,
lone songs wail in the distance
in frozen moon's silver spotlight,
a mark left where paws had paused.











Written by: January 16th, 2015


Inspired by creature #3 Coyote

nette onclaud's contest - NIGHT CREATURES


This poem was also inspired by actual events. A few weeks ago, I discovered 
some large animal paw prints that were left in the snow, near my home. I later
found out that the tracks were made by a wolf.
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Duncan Avatar
May 8, 2017 at 12:30 AM
Loving this verse. A 7 for sure :)
Deschler Avatar
September 24, 2017 at 4:41 PM
Thank you so much, Debbie :)
Breedt Avatar
July 20, 2016 at 7:21 AM
Ouch for this one! Eerily reminder about today... I just had the vet here and had to put my 2nd dog down to rabies.Most terrifying experience. Well written
Deschler Avatar
August 27, 2016 at 7:57 PM
Thank you, Jannie. I appreciate your kind comments... I'm sorry to hear the sad news about your dog :(
Sankey- Lewis Avatar
February 26, 2015 at 2:46 PM
You took me there, Kelly, where I, too, was awed by paws of wolf. Moment, mood, atmosphere. brilliant!
Deschler Avatar
March 1, 2015 at 4:00 PM
I really appreciate your wonderful comments, Iris. Thank you so much!
Dunn Avatar
February 15, 2015 at 7:42 PM
Dear Kelly, Creepy and scary boy did I enjoy this one, lol love your last lines, good luck in the contest I think you have a great chance of winning I'll keep my fingers crossed for you my friend, cheri ps love the part about the paw prints nice extra touch, and great line also.
Deschler Avatar
February 19, 2015 at 10:41 PM
Thank you so much for your great comments, dear Cheri. I am so glad you enjoyed my poem and appreciated it's dark and creepy tone. I love that about your work, as well!... This contest has been judged and I placed in 3rd. I still appreciate all of your support :)
Fleming Avatar
February 1, 2015 at 5:10 PM
This short poem of yours certainly is "Atmospheric"! Hello, Kelly. :) john.
Deschler Avatar
February 3, 2015 at 10:08 PM
Hello, John. Thank you for your nice comments. I really wanted to capture the rural area where I live. We could only write a six line poem for this contest, so, it was fun to try and fit it all in!
Mays Avatar
January 31, 2015 at 9:46 PM
I love the images in this poem! Beautifully written. Thanks for the inspiration. Carol
Deschler Avatar
February 2, 2015 at 10:10 PM
You're welcome, Carol. Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind comments. I'm so glad you've enjoyed it!
Dhaou Avatar
January 26, 2015 at 11:20 AM
This splendid piece takes its charm from a full-fledged reality that culminated in something praise-worthy. Vivid imagery and above all powerful emotion. Thanks heaps Kelly Deschler for sharing !
Deschler Avatar
January 29, 2015 at 12:23 AM
You're very welcome! I am happy that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so much for your kind comments. I really appreciate it!
Onclaud Avatar
January 26, 2015 at 9:57 AM
some kind of mystery haunting me in a delightful way, Kelly... huge congrats and thanks for joining my contest!
Deschler Avatar
January 29, 2015 at 12:17 AM
Thank you for including my poem on your winner's list. It was a wonderful contest, Nette, and a pleasure to write for :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 22, 2015 at 5:52 PM
Congratulations on this poem being a winner Kelly. I just loved it, as you know by my previous comment. Hooray!
Deschler Avatar
January 26, 2015 at 11:45 PM
I'm happy that you enjoyed it, Connie. Thank you once again for your kindness!
Kayode Avatar
January 21, 2015 at 11:10 PM
This is nicely done Kelly,congrats on the win my friend...huggs
Deschler Avatar
January 26, 2015 at 4:23 PM
I really appreciate your kind comments and congrats. Thank you very much, my friend. Hugs :)
Dietrich Avatar
January 21, 2015 at 2:24 PM
this one is really good, Kelly. I like how you based it too on reality. Congrats.
Deschler Avatar
January 25, 2015 at 3:40 PM
Thank you very much for your kind words, Andrea... It is difficult for me to write about things that I've never experienced, so I always try to draw from reality when I need inspiration.
Kendrick Avatar
January 21, 2015 at 1:51 PM
: ) !!! SK
Deschler Avatar
January 25, 2015 at 3:16 PM
:)
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
January 21, 2015 at 7:39 AM
I love the imagery, Kelly. I can see the frozen moon's silver beams and hear the lone song...beautiful! Congrats...hugs, Rhonda
Deschler Avatar
January 25, 2015 at 2:53 PM
Thank you so much, Rhonda. I'm happy you enjoyed it! Hugs :)
Chakrabarty Avatar
January 21, 2015 at 7:01 AM
"lone songs wail in the distance in frozen moon's silver spotlight, a mark left where paws had paused" Oh Oh Kelly this is poetry, this I wanted, this image. My fav listed Love, Congrats>rajat
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 10:15 PM
I'm happy you enjoyed this poem, Rajat. Those last few lines are my favorite. Thank you so much for your kind words and the fav!
A. Sharma Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 9:29 PM
Real beautiful Kelly,, n the true inspiration u got is scary indeed,, take care ! Congrats on big win!
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 10:05 PM
Thank you so much, Dr. Upma. It is scary knowing that a wolf could be so close to my home. I just need to be more cautious when I'm outdoors and keep my eyes wide open.
Guzzi Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 7:24 PM
We have coyotes in the woods behind our house [shiver] be careful kiddo! Congrad's on your win. Light & love
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 9:53 PM
Thank you very much, Debbie. I haven't seen any tracks lately, but I am still limiting the time I spend outdoors, just to be safe.
Callus Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 2:32 PM
Well done Kelly; your mysterious poem is lovely and leaves its mark on my imagination...similar to that left by the paws. Congratulations ..... a very merited win! #7 // paul
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 9:37 PM
Thank you very, very much, Paul. That last line is my favorite. I'm glad it had the lasting impact that I hoped it would!
Allison Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 2:19 PM
Stunning imagery Kelly the ending is delightful:-) Many congrats:-) Hugs Jan
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 9:22 PM
Thank you so much, Jan. That last line is my favorite part of the poem. The word play of paws/paused just came into my mind one day and I thought it would make a great ending... Hugs :)
Kiser Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 1:30 PM
I can see that coyote, baying at the moon, in the distance...well done.
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 9:10 PM
Thank you very much, M.L.
Haight Avatar
January 20, 2015 at 1:11 PM
Kelly, congratulations on your nice win for your wonderfully descriptive Coyote poem. Hugs, Sandra
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 7:02 PM
Thank you for your kind comments and congrats. I very much appreciate them, Sandra. Hugs!
Carroll Avatar
January 19, 2015 at 6:08 PM
Lovely descriptive write Kelly..
Deschler Avatar
January 23, 2015 at 1:05 AM
Thank you so much, Ken.
Lamoureux Avatar
January 18, 2015 at 11:03 PM
A very effective piece. I seen a wolf running down one of our main streets a few days ago. The poor fellow looked extreamly stressed.
Deschler Avatar
January 22, 2015 at 2:11 AM
Thank you, Rick.... I would not expect to see a wolf so close to town. I wonder what was wrong with him?
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 18, 2015 at 11:01 PM
I was picturing a wolf when reading this Kelly. I just love the way you have ended this with such originality that will linger long in my mind! Beautiful! You have weaved your realism into this poem with intricate accuracy. I know this one will be a winner!#7
Deschler Avatar
January 22, 2015 at 1:57 AM
Thank you so much for your encouraging comments. I truly appreciate your kindness, Connie!... You were right, this poem did turn out to be a winner for me!
Kendrick Avatar
January 18, 2015 at 4:46 PM
Scary to think that a wolf was so close by..We have coyotes here that are seen from time to time..We also have BobCats which I have not ever seen one of them..There are panthers or mountain lions in this area as well but I have never seen one near my home but saw one dead in a few counties over..People who have feeding stations for deer and have cameras there to take time lapse pictures have got some pictures of a black panther..Thanks for stopping by..This one is well done in a few lines..Sara
Deschler Avatar
January 22, 2015 at 1:31 AM
Thank you for your nice comments, Sara. I really appreciate you taking the time to do so... It was scary to find such large tracks in my yard and to know they were made by a wolf was even scarier. We do have coyotes and bobcats, too, but I have never seen them. We hear them often, so I know they're around!
Fleming Avatar
January 18, 2015 at 10:48 AM
A very lovely little piece of poetry, Kelly...simply enchanting! :) john.
Deschler Avatar
January 22, 2015 at 1:06 AM
Thank you, John. These kind comments mean a lot coming from you! :)
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