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Creature In the Night

Where cold stars exist in the dark, serene winds whisper to trees and scarce human ears can listen, lone songs wail in the distance in frozen moon's silver spotlight, a mark left where paws had paused. Written by: January 16th, 2015 Inspired by creature #3 Coyote nette onclaud's contest - NIGHT CREATURES This poem was also inspired by actual events. A few weeks ago, I discovered some large animal paw prints that were left in the snow, near my home. I later found out that the tracks were made by a wolf.

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 5/8/2017 12:30:00 AM

Loving this verse. A 7 for sure :)

Kelly Deschler
Date: 9/24/2017 4:41:00 PM

Thank you so much, Debbie :)

Jannie Breedt

Date: 7/20/2016 7:21:00 AM

Ouch for this one! Eerily reminder about today... I just had the vet here and had to put my 2nd dog down to rabies.Most terrifying experience. Well written

Kelly Deschler
Date: 8/27/2016 7:57:00 PM

Thank you, Jannie. I appreciate your kind comments... I'm sorry to hear the sad news about your dog :(

Iris E. S-Lewis

Date: 2/26/2015 2:46:00 PM

You took me there, Kelly, where I, too, was awed by paws of wolf. Moment, mood, atmosphere. brilliant!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 3/1/2015 4:00:00 PM

I really appreciate your wonderful comments, Iris. Thank you so much!

Cherl Dunn

Date: 2/15/2015 7:42:00 PM

Dear Kelly, Creepy and scary boy did I enjoy this one, lol love your last lines, good luck in the contest I think you have a great chance of winning I'll keep my fingers crossed for you my friend, cheri ps love the part about the paw prints nice extra touch, and great line also.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/19/2015 10:41:00 PM

Thank you so much for your great comments, dear Cheri. I am so glad you enjoyed my poem and appreciated it's dark and creepy tone. I love that about your work, as well!... This contest has been judged and I placed in 3rd. I still appreciate all of your support :)

John Fleming

Date: 2/1/2015 5:10:00 PM

This short poem of yours certainly is "Atmospheric"! Hello, Kelly. :) john.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/3/2015 10:08:00 PM

Hello, John. Thank you for your nice comments. I really wanted to capture the rural area where I live. We could only write a six line poem for this contest, so, it was fun to try and fit it all in!

Carol Mays

Date: 1/31/2015 9:46:00 PM

I love the images in this poem! Beautifully written. Thanks for the inspiration. Carol

Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/2/2015 10:10:00 PM

You're welcome, Carol. Thank you for reading my poem and for your kind comments. I'm so glad you've enjoyed it!

Abdelwaheb Dhaou

Date: 1/26/2015 11:20:00 AM

This splendid piece takes its charm from a full-fledged reality that culminated in something praise-worthy. Vivid imagery and above all powerful emotion. Thanks heaps Kelly Deschler for sharing !

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/29/2015 12:23:00 AM

You're very welcome! I am happy that you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so much for your kind comments. I really appreciate it!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/26/2015 9:57:00 AM

some kind of mystery haunting me in a delightful way, Kelly... huge congrats and thanks for joining my contest!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/29/2015 12:17:00 AM

Thank you for including my poem on your winner's list. It was a wonderful contest, Nette, and a pleasure to write for :)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/22/2015 5:52:00 PM

Congratulations on this poem being a winner Kelly. I just loved it, as you know by my previous comment. Hooray!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/26/2015 11:45:00 PM

I'm happy that you enjoyed it, Connie. Thank you once again for your kindness!

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 1/21/2015 11:10:00 PM

This is nicely done Kelly,congrats on the win my friend...huggs

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/26/2015 4:23:00 PM

I really appreciate your kind comments and congrats. Thank you very much, my friend. Hugs :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/21/2015 2:24:00 PM

this one is really good, Kelly. I like how you based it too on reality. Congrats.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/25/2015 3:40:00 PM

Thank you very much for your kind words, Andrea... It is difficult for me to write about things that I've never experienced, so I always try to draw from reality when I need inspiration.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/21/2015 1:51:00 PM

: ) !!! SK

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/25/2015 3:16:00 PM

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/21/2015 7:39:00 AM

I love the imagery, Kelly. I can see the frozen moon's silver beams and hear the lone song...beautiful! Congrats...hugs, Rhonda

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/25/2015 2:53:00 PM

Thank you so much, Rhonda. I'm happy you enjoyed it! Hugs :)

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/21/2015 7:01:00 AM

"lone songs wail in the distance in frozen moon's silver spotlight, a mark left where paws had paused" Oh Oh Kelly this is poetry, this I wanted, this image. My fav listed Love, Congrats>rajat

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 10:15:00 PM

I'm happy you enjoyed this poem, Rajat. Those last few lines are my favorite. Thank you so much for your kind words and the fav!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/20/2015 9:29:00 PM

Real beautiful Kelly,, n the true inspiration u got is scary indeed,, take care ! Congrats on big win!

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 10:05:00 PM

Thank you so much, Dr. Upma. It is scary knowing that a wolf could be so close to my home. I just need to be more cautious when I'm outdoors and keep my eyes wide open.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/20/2015 7:24:00 PM

We have coyotes in the woods behind our house [shiver] be careful kiddo! Congrad's on your win. Light & love

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 9:53:00 PM

Thank you very much, Debbie. I haven't seen any tracks lately, but I am still limiting the time I spend outdoors, just to be safe.

Paul Callus

Date: 1/20/2015 2:32:00 PM

Well done Kelly; your mysterious poem is lovely and leaves its mark on my imagination...similar to that left by the paws. Congratulations ..... a very merited win! #7 // paul

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 9:37:00 PM

Thank you very, very much, Paul. That last line is my favorite. I'm glad it had the lasting impact that I hoped it would!

Jan Allison

Date: 1/20/2015 2:19:00 PM

Stunning imagery Kelly the ending is delightful:-) Many congrats:-) Hugs Jan

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 9:22:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jan. That last line is my favorite part of the poem. The word play of paws/paused just came into my mind one day and I thought it would make a great ending... Hugs :)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/20/2015 1:30:00 PM

I can see that coyote, baying at the moon, in the distance...well done.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 9:10:00 PM

Thank you very much, M.L.

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/20/2015 1:11:00 PM

Kelly, congratulations on your nice win for your wonderfully descriptive Coyote poem. Hugs, Sandra

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 7:02:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comments and congrats. I very much appreciate them, Sandra. Hugs!

Ken Carroll

Date: 1/19/2015 6:08:00 PM

Lovely descriptive write Kelly..

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/23/2015 1:05:00 AM

Thank you so much, Ken.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/18/2015 11:03:00 PM

A very effective piece. I seen a wolf running down one of our main streets a few days ago. The poor fellow looked extreamly stressed.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/22/2015 2:11:00 AM

Thank you, Rick.... I would not expect to see a wolf so close to town. I wonder what was wrong with him?

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/18/2015 11:01:00 PM

I was picturing a wolf when reading this Kelly. I just love the way you have ended this with such originality that will linger long in my mind! Beautiful! You have weaved your realism into this poem with intricate accuracy. I know this one will be a winner!#7

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/22/2015 1:57:00 AM

Thank you so much for your encouraging comments. I truly appreciate your kindness, Connie!... You were right, this poem did turn out to be a winner for me!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 1/18/2015 4:46:00 PM

Scary to think that a wolf was so close by..We have coyotes here that are seen from time to time..We also have BobCats which I have not ever seen one of them..There are panthers or mountain lions in this area as well but I have never seen one near my home but saw one dead in a few counties over..People who have feeding stations for deer and have cameras there to take time lapse pictures have got some pictures of a black panther..Thanks for stopping by..This one is well done in a few lines..Sara

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/22/2015 1:31:00 AM

Thank you for your nice comments, Sara. I really appreciate you taking the time to do so... It was scary to find such large tracks in my yard and to know they were made by a wolf was even scarier. We do have coyotes and bobcats, too, but I have never seen them. We hear them often, so I know they're around!

John Fleming

Date: 1/18/2015 10:48:00 AM

A very lovely little piece of poetry, Kelly...simply enchanting! :) john.

Kelly Deschler
Date: 1/22/2015 1:06:00 AM

Thank you, John. These kind comments mean a lot coming from you! :)