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Consciousness Correction

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Written: November 12, 2023, For Unseekeing Seeker Contest _____________________________________________ Love is a rule binding us all, broad yet near, Saffron sun sparks souls and spells fear. Anger, stern iron law, and lethal sword to slay, Charm shine, truth is a virtue, clean for aye! We dwell in an ambivalent demesne of mind, As feelings and amorphous concepts collide. Follow me in this odyssey of introspection, Delving into a quest for our soul's correction. On this planet, hate spreads as a blaze, Swallowed in the raging blast of a maze. Consciousness draws us to raw heights, Where dignity and empathy reign sleight. Our abode is the vast canvas of the brain, Disguised skepticism and ideologies strain. This is where we face our darkest fears, And delve into the roots of rage and tears. Apathy is a cancer that eats at the soul, A fatal illness that harms beyond control. The way to growth requires looking inward, Tear rage webs apart. Hello is a flimsy word. I hear the quiet ticking of the clock in the hall, That clock has put me to sleep. A crimson ball. Being fed lies and fake facts, my soul is aware, You ought to not have lied to me or compared. Upon venting the wrath to a dear friend, Anger melted, and the load did transcend. I spoke with trust, unburdened by my soul, And I gazed as my grief started to console In this case, it is a correction that leads the way, As we release our mutual animosity and affray. For the sake of our deepest inner rectification, We uncover the splendor of our actual reflection.

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Date: 12/4/2023 11:52:00 AM
Once again, dear friend, you take me on a journey through negativity into the sunlight of new awareness spoken with clarity of thought and purity of emotion abandoning the anger and the hate. As always pinpoint imagery and eloquent, poetic expression. Your poem is one of hope that we can rise into new realms. So happy to see this on the winners list. So happy for you, Lasaad! Blessings of peace, joy, love and hope.
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Date: 11/30/2023 4:38:00 PM
A splendid write--love the ending, Lasaad--and all in between, of course. Pardon my measure of eloquent words--if they e'er be so--whereto, you are peerless, my friend. My compliments on your win in US's contest. Aloha, William
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Date: 11/30/2023 7:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderful win. A powerful/lovely write. Great Job... Have a wonderful/blessed day with your win...................
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Date: 11/30/2023 5:51:00 AM
The audio clip doesn’t do this beautiful poem Justice. Congratulations on being selected as a winner.
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Date: 11/29/2023 10:42:00 PM
Congratulations Master Sotto for your masterful poem which was obviously poised for a win with its depth of thoughts, diction, rhythm and flow.
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Date: 11/19/2023 2:20:00 AM
You have penned a beautiful poem here! Very true and hits the spot! All the best in the contest!
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Date: 11/15/2023 1:25:00 PM
Dear Sotto, I had to read your entry for this contest as you always present with such an eloquent perspective. I loved your lines, "on this planet hate spreads as a blaze, swallowed in the raging blast of a maze". Wonderful imagery and such a timely write. God bless and good luck.
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Date: 11/13/2023 6:34:00 AM
Much depth you convey, my friend. Not easy to conquer emotions--I like the positive turn ending in reconciliation.
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Date: 11/13/2023 3:18:00 AM
Dear sotto this is a very powerful poem where you’ve expressed these deep emotions in such eloquence. I love your word choices and also rhymes as well as how soul hitting every line is. When anger and hatred takes over sometimes we see the worst of all and like you’ve said there, hate spreads so fast, but we still believe that love conquers all, and can be the cure for all. Ive seen so much of this and i agree with your last lines too how venting too helps. Very well woven for the prompt. BOL
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Date: 11/13/2023 1:21:00 AM
Sometimes I feel I'm dealing with a philosopher. So many ideas are interwoven in this poem. Blessings.
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Date: 11/12/2023 11:16:00 PM
Wonderful. You went deeply into anger, and came out lovingly. Consciousness correction! Lasaard this a wonderful poem. Best of Luck. I think its a sure winner. SV.
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Date: 11/12/2023 5:50:00 PM
Such inspiration! It really spoke to me, Sotto! A pleasure! You're a master of rhyme.. :)
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Date: 11/12/2023 5:31:00 PM
dearest Sotto--I am spellbound and breathless. Your poem spoke to me on so many levels. I loved so many lines full of wisdom-filled imagery about love, fear, and introspection--the act of conscious correction. That was the perfect title. I loved "apathy is a cancer that eats at the soul." So true. When our soul is aware and conscious dignity and empathy truly do reign. Your rhyme scheme flowed as your insights unfurled before my eyes. The word I want to use is "exquisite". Am faving dear Sotto
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