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Hutinashro

Created by Connor Lotts...each line has 8 syllables. Iambic tetrameter is optional. Divide the poem into 3 stanzas, 12 lines in the first 2 stanzas with an Aabccbddbeeb rhyme scheme. The first two stanzas share the first line. The last stanza, is 3 lines with an aba rhyme scheme.

Concrete Caves

The night sky is ablaze with stars
and planets like Venus and Mars.
A sight, unseen in the city,
for background lights obscure our view
and what stars we see, are but few.
It is a modern-day pity,
stars are so difficult to see.
Sailing in an ebony sea,
there is nothing quite as pretty.
Like crystalline gems sparkling bright
billions of stars light up the night
and yet, they're so itty-bitty.

Earth's a jewel in its own right,
adorning space with sky blue light. 
But the universe goes unseen,
for city lights levy a toll
we might as well wear a blindfold.
And yet, the Milky Way's still a
serene spectacle to behold.
Amidst stardust, life's genes unfold,
a life-generating machine.
The night's alight from the big bang
stars are the sparks from which life sprang 
forming galaxies where none had been.

We've lost sight of the stars at night
content to live in concrete caves
views blocked by a backwash of light.


(Hutinashro)


Nov. 14, 2018

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