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Coldblooded

His long, sleek, diamond clad body,
more coldblooded than vampires;
no second life offered his prey.
Lying in venomous wait,
he'll rattle you with a warning
while aiming his deadly kiss.



Arlene Smith
01/15/15
Contest: Night creatures
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
No. 2--rattlesnake

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Emile Pinet

January 23, 2015 at 9:57 AM

I hate snakes , but I like this. well done.

Monterey Sirak

January 21, 2015 at 9:19 AM

Your poem has a scary feel to match the real thing. I was bitten by a rattlesnake a few years back.

Andrea Dietrich

January 20, 2015 at 7:14 PM

Love that last part. He will rattle his warning and give a deadly kiss!! Nice job.

Shadow Hamilton

January 20, 2015 at 5:07 PM

well portrayed Arlene gl in contest hugs 7

Sara Kendrick

January 20, 2015 at 5:50 AM

Reads like a winner..I faced a rattler in my herb garden a few years back..When I first saw it, I thought it was a chicken snake like we have around here..Then I saw its diamond shaped head and knew it was venomous..I had a knife in my hand about 6 inches or maybe 8 inches long..I tried to stab it with the knife..It coiled and prepared to strike with its mouth open and fangs showing..When it dropped to crawl off, I tried to get it right behind its head with the knife..Scary episode..SK

Sara Kendrick

January 20, 2015 at 5:51 AM

I told it you just go on down in the woods and stay there..It crawled off ..I don't know if it died or not..Sara

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