L Milton Hankins Poet Haiku

Cold Feet

ice-shrouded tree limbs
tilt perilously groundward
sparrows have cold feet

THIRD PLACE WINNER
written November 15, 2022
syllables checked by PS
for "Winter Haiku Poetry Contest"
sponsored by Tania Kitchin

#20 on Best 100 New Poems List
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February 1, 2022

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Jeff Kyser February 14, 2022 at 9:03 AM in general, I am not a haiku fan, probably mostly because I am an oafish rube who doesn't understand the form, but this i like!

Eve Roper February 11, 2022 at 5:40 PM Great Haiku, Milt, very cold feeling.

William Kelii Kekaula February 7, 2022 at 7:48 AM Oh! Good one, Milt, I'm glad to have found this gem of yours and chime in my friend, Aloha~aka William, moving forward with my life. L Milton Hankins February 7, 2022 at 8:06 AM This is good to hear, William. Good to hear from you. Hope you have a wonderful week. Aloha.

Mike Gentile January 28, 2022 at 8:37 AM I can see why this was a winner Milt! Excellent !! L Milton Hankins January 28, 2022 at 9:29 AM Thanks, Mike. I really appreciate your compliment.

Andrea Dietrich January 21, 2022 at 11:35 AM this is sure a cute one with the sparrow line. Love it, and belated Congrats L Milton Hankins January 21, 2022 at 12:13 PM Thank you so much, Andrea. I suspect the other birds have cold feet, too, but the sparrows are so small and fragile.

Kim Merryman January 18, 2022 at 12:45 PM I bet their feet aren't the only thing that's cold. Great haiku, Milt! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M L Milton Hankins January 18, 2022 at 4:28 PM No doubt their patootie, too.

Sam Kauffman January 18, 2022 at 11:10 AM Milt, congratulations on your win! The forest is truly an amazing, enchanted place when ice coats the trees. Love your metaphor of bending but not breaking and your observation about the sparrows is delightful! Hope they have a warm and cozy nest to warm those feet. Blessings. Sam Kauffman January 18, 2022 at 12:07 PM Can you send some of that snow our way? We have a blocking high off the coast that is keeping the rain from us and the snow from the mountains! Have noticed that you all have been in the grip of winter! Sending back warm and cozy blessings to you - and warm feet! L Milton Hankins January 18, 2022 at 11:59 AM Sam, thank you so much for your thoughtful response to my poem. We are in the midst of a cold winter snap with lots of snow. I hope you are warm and cozy.

Paulette Calasibetta January 18, 2022 at 5:30 AM Love the imagery~congratulations on your win! :) Paulette L Milton Hankins January 18, 2022 at 8:02 AM Thank you so much, Paulette. I liked this myself.

Terry Miller January 18, 2022 at 12:52 AM Not only sparrows, great win Milton, congratulations! L Milton Hankins January 18, 2022 at 8:02 AM True, indeed, Terry. Having just cleaned off my car and cleared my driveway, I know the true meaning of "cold feet."

Brian Sambourne January 17, 2022 at 1:58 PM Funny + clever, Milton. An original take on the contest. Rates high with me. Cheers, Brian L Milton Hankins January 17, 2022 at 2:03 PM Thank you so much for your compliment, Brian. I always appreciate your thoughts.

Anne-Lise Andresen January 17, 2022 at 12:14 PM - They must get wool socks in the winter ... lovely written, Milton :) - Congratulations on your winning placement :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) L Milton Hankins January 17, 2022 at 2:04 PM Anne-Lise, thank you. Yes, I think they must wish they could do something to protect their tender feet. Nature is not always kind, you know.

Alexis Y. January 17, 2022 at 8:45 AM Hi Milt, I'm just coming back to say congrats on your winning write-Alexis L Milton Hankins January 17, 2022 at 12:02 PM Thanks, Alexis.

Tania Kitchin January 17, 2022 at 8:34 AM Milton, congratulations on your bronze placement with your beautiful poem, love the last line! L Milton Hankins January 17, 2022 at 8:42 AM Thanks, Tania. I really enjoyed the contest. You got some real winners, so I was pleased with my placement.

Caren Krutsinger January 17, 2022 at 3:26 AM I love the ending line! L Milton Hankins January 17, 2022 at 9:15 AM Me, too. I swear I have seen birds shivering in this cold weather!

Alexis Y. January 16, 2022 at 4:14 PM Hi Milt, You have penned such lovely imagery in your “Winter” haiku. Best wishes in the contest. Have great day-Alexis L Milton Hankins January 16, 2022 at 4:26 PM Thank you, Alexis. From the winter haikus I have read, the competition is very stiff in this contest. I just hope I place!

Shirley Candy January 16, 2022 at 9:57 AM I Love this haiku of yours.. what a beautiful imagery L Milton Hankins January 16, 2022 at 10:22 AM Thanks, Shirley. I find winter haikus particularly hard to write.

Charles Messina January 16, 2022 at 5:29 AM Wonderful Imagery, best wishes in the contest with this gem! L Milton Hankins January 16, 2022 at 9:20 AM Thanks so much, Charlie. Have a marvelous Sunday afternoon!