Daver Austin Poet Narrative

Cold Day

COLD DAY

Cold day
June 29th
Windy
Leaf shadows ice the tree trunks
Sunshine looks cold
And there is helter-skelter

Cold day
Barely into summer
When the leaf-dance begins it tangos rather than waltzes
Under the skin is still warm
But the weather boils cold

Cold day
June 29th
What will July bring?
July sits just under the sun    looking down
     watching its chance to filter in
But June will go out with a shiver

♡Like0

Share Poem

---

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Juan Paolo Galua July 23, 2010 at 5:00 AM When the leaf-dance begins it tangos rather than waltzes....beautiful...simply beautiful

Kabuteng P.Ink K. July 9, 2010 at 3:20 PM ooh a cold write-- apparently all that July brought was hot, hot, hot!! This one sure made me feel the breeze--loved that part about the leaf dance!! ^_^ --nikko :)

Sara Kendrick July 5, 2010 at 1:49 PM Was it really cold on June 29? It has been really hot here but then we have had some better days since July came in..Some breezes stirring which has helped to dry the air out some..That humidity here is awful in the summer..Keep the creative pen flowing..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work.. Sara

Carolyn Devonshire July 3, 2010 at 3:18 PM Well, did it heat up yet, Daver? Maybe the fireworks this weekend will help provide more of a summer atmosphere. It's hot as Hades here and I'd gladly trade places with you! Love, Carolyn

Skat A June 30, 2010 at 12:10 PM I HOPE JULY IS A BETTER MONTH. WAITING WITH PATIENTS. FOR THEM WORKS. LOVED IT.-SKAT

Harry Horsman June 30, 2010 at 8:14 AM it's the middle of our winter here in Oz, Daver i could feel your writing, excellent stuff Harry

Tim Ryerson June 30, 2010 at 2:50 AM Great stuff, Daver!....it was over 90 degrees down here yesterday...love the last verse especially - Tim

David Byrne June 29, 2010 at 8:09 PM I like it!

Audrey Haick June 29, 2010 at 8:28 AM We had a taste of this, Daver! It was still beautiful, I think. Like the sun and the rain were in a battle. Love the imagery. Goes to my favs! Peace, love, Audrey

Sarah Hales June 29, 2010 at 8:23 AM Great read really enjoyed ...Thank You for my comments sarah x I will keep an eye out for your work really enjoyed x

Linda-Marie Sweetheart June 29, 2010 at 7:42 AM Amazing descriptive words Daver.. is it really that cold where u are? I am on vacation in Hawaii and its so hot here I LUV it so much.. it truly is Paradise.. a belated birthday gift.. WoW.. enjoyed with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii...

Poet Destroyer A June 29, 2010 at 7:33 AM I really love this one Daver, nice to know June is going out with a chill,,,I myself wonder what July has for this Girly.. Besides fun,,,loved your narrative once again,,have a nice one...Good flow by the way,..SidneyLeeAnn

Carrie Richards June 29, 2010 at 7:21 AM June has not gone out with a shiver under my summer sunshine, which peaked to 103 yesterday!! Give me a little shiver for the end of June! It would be gladly welcome here! Love this little poem!! :) Love, Carrie

Andrea Dietrich June 29, 2010 at 6:58 AM ooooh, shiver me timbers, I like THIS one!!! YOu know I do love free verse (when I can understand it, Daver) And this is totally clear and so descriptive! LUv, Andrea ps Not heard back from your favorite poet yet. I think my rhyming just too much for her. hahaha.