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Clutching At Straws

Deprived of love and hope 
She finds it hard to cope 
Yearning to fill her empty bowl 
To the devil she would sell her soul.

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Four Line Contest in Rhyme
Hosted by Silent One
Placed 2nd

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2018

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Vladislav Raven

October 27, 2018 at 10:12 AM

Hi Paul, my much belated congratulations on your win with this much deserved poetic gem. You are so creative within four lines Paul. Such sadly strong lines that create such a dark image. I love the content. For this piece, I shall put in an extra fave. This write is so deserving Paul. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.

October 27, 2018 at 3:53 PM

Both the congrats, fav and complimentary remarks are truly appreciated, my friend...thank you! Best regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

September 30, 2018 at 2:59 AM

Hi Paul, Very powerful words. Great write! Regards, Jennifer

September 30, 2018 at 5:32 AM

Thank you for stopping by, Jennifer...pleased to make your acquaintance:) Regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

July 23, 2018 at 1:22 PM

A truly sad poetic insight into a state of mind caused by loneliness, Paul. Gripping and gritty tale of truth. Mighty fine poetry. Love and smiles and smiles of joy.

July 25, 2018 at 11:07 AM

Thank you for the insightful feedback, Freddie. Best wishes and smiles to you, too:) // paul

July 10, 2018 at 5:19 AM

WoW! So many young souls have fallen into that trap. Too eager to be accepted they are willing to do anything for friendship or love. Sometimes they learn too late it is just a trap for the untrained mind. Great job here. So much wisdom in such few words. Excellent Paul. God Bless, JB

July 10, 2018 at 10:59 AM

Thank you for the insightful feedback and generous comments, Judy. Regards & blessings // paul

Besma Riabi Dziri

July 8, 2018 at 5:57 PM

A genuine depiction of a human state of heart, mind and soul.. Indeed, hopeless, helpless and fragile souls are an easy prey to "the devil" to which they cling! A brilliant rendition of an appalling truth! A FAV and a pleasure to read! Congratulations on your win Paul! Stay safe and blessed always.

July 9, 2018 at 3:25 PM

Thank you for your insightful comments, Besma...and for the fav...much appreciated. Regards & blessings. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

June 20, 2018 at 8:48 AM

Very effective use of your four lines.

June 23, 2018 at 3:50 AM

Thank you, Richard. Best regards // paul

June 19, 2018 at 12:59 PM

Excellent my friend

June 23, 2018 at 3:49 AM

Your 'excellent' is truly appreciated, my friend. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

June 16, 2018 at 10:34 AM

A good descriptive write on one living in hopelessness, Paul. Congrats in the contest.

June 23, 2018 at 3:48 AM

Hi Andrea, excuse the late reply; computer problems caused a pileup of mail which I'm still trying to clear! Thank you for reading and liking. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

June 15, 2018 at 7:26 AM

powerful in a short verse.

June 15, 2018 at 11:29 AM

What a pleasant surprise, Casarah:) Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

June 14, 2018 at 8:53 PM

Wonderful sad write, Paul !:-) Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~’*

June 15, 2018 at 2:10 AM

Thank you, Eve. I loved your winning entry:) Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

June 14, 2018 at 7:17 PM

Congratulations, Paul. I do not think I had even seen this one yet!!

June 15, 2018 at 2:08 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I think I have already commented on your winning entry. Regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

June 14, 2018 at 1:30 PM

Hell Pau, on your win.i hope she does not give her soul to the devil.Reguards Darlene

June 14, 2018 at 3:14 PM

Thank you, Darlene; I sure hope she doesn't! Regards // paul

June 13, 2018 at 7:30 AM

Congratulations for your win Paul :)

June 13, 2018 at 2:15 PM

Thank you, Heidi:) Your entry was a worthy winner, too! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 13, 2018 at 7:11 AM

- Congratulations on your little rhyme poem, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

June 13, 2018 at 2:02 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise. Pleased to see you standing on the podium next to me:) Hugs // paul

June 13, 2018 at 7:11 AM

Back with congratulations Paul. Tom.

June 13, 2018 at 2:03 PM

Thank you, Tom. Regards // paul

June 13, 2018 at 7:03 AM

Dark four lines and very sad also... Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

June 13, 2018 at 2:01 PM

Thank you, S-1. Pleased to be on the winners' list. Regards // paul

June 12, 2018 at 6:00 PM

You describe feeling lonely and hopeless with a fitting image. Good luck in the contest, Paul.

June 13, 2018 at 1:58 PM

Thank you Agnes. Good luck wishes were not in vain...helped the poem gain a podium finish:) Regards // paul

June 12, 2018 at 5:25 AM

Well, lets hope it wont come to that. Great imaginative 4 liner Paul, winning material here. Good luck in the contest my friend....Maria hugs

June 12, 2018 at 12:10 PM

Thank you for being such a kind judge of my poem, Maria! Always a pleasure to have you visiting:) Hugs // paul

June 11, 2018 at 11:24 PM

This short write leaves me wanting to know four more lines of what happens next. That "wanting" is poetic magic!

June 12, 2018 at 2:33 AM

Thank you! The urge to keep delving beyond the top layers is what I usually try transmit. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

June 10, 2018 at 8:19 PM

It is always sad to encounter people who are at their wits' end, struggling to cope. With some guidance, perhaps we can help them make the right choices. Beautifully composed, Paul. Hugs, Carolyn

June 11, 2018 at 11:25 AM

Thank you for the insightful comments, Carolyn. Glad you enjoyed. Sometimes even a single word could alter the course of a difficult situation. Hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

June 10, 2018 at 12:22 AM

Desperation makes many people do anything they can to obtain their goals. Is so sad when they cannot achieve the success they so want to attain. Beautiful Paul! It is wonderful to read your poetry again. Love, Connie : )

June 10, 2018 at 7:20 AM

Thank you, Connie. It is my pleasure to have you visiting again, and I hope that surgery has been beneficial in more ways than one. Warm regards // paul

June 9, 2018 at 5:25 PM

You pack plenty of punch in to your 4 liner, Paul..awesome.

June 9, 2018 at 5:29 PM

You are too kind, Harry:) Thank you...and regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 9, 2018 at 2:19 PM

- A deep and sad poem, Paul - Excellent written - Luck in the contest - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

June 9, 2018 at 5:29 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise:) May you, too, enjoy a very lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul

June 9, 2018 at 12:55 PM

Very powerful, a truth non want to face! Best wishes for the contest. Mick

June 9, 2018 at 5:24 PM

Thank you, Mick. Best regards // paul

June 9, 2018 at 12:17 PM

Such touching depth in the profound expression of your beautiful and meaningful lines, Paul. Your last two lines are exquisite in desperate emotion. Best wishes for a win - but already a big winner with me my wonderful friend.. Warmest wishes and hugs to you :)) ~Susan

June 9, 2018 at 5:28 PM

You are certainly one of my favourite judges, Susan:) Thank you for the awesome feedback with which you instill heaps of encouragement. ~ Warm regards and hugs to you, my friend. // paul

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