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cumulus there dazzlingly bright floats above in motionless flight teases, slow-dances furtively deep skies of lapis lazuli!

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Lena Townsend

Date: 3/19/2009 8:47:00 AM

Beautiful... Lapis is such a deep shade of blue... this line brings so much depth to this write. It is indicative of the depth of the writers soul. I love the vivid image this piece created in my mind. It brings back memories of laying back on the lawn as a child and picking out shapes and pictures in the painted skies above. Lovely write. Smiles from Lolita

Arany P.

Date: 3/19/2009 7:00:00 AM

wonderful writing... the rhyme in the end is weird but lovely... and i love the 'teases...' line its reminds school to me! ~ Arany

Amy Swanson

Date: 3/19/2009 5:39:00 AM

Beautiful with rich and lovely images! I love "deep skies of lapis lazuli", a true poet's painting written with artful words. :) Love, Amy

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 3/19/2009 4:43:00 AM

Well written, with fine couplet rhyming and flow... BRAVO Romeo! Best wishes, Keith