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cumulus there dazzlingly bright
      floats above  in motionless flight
              teases, slow-dances furtively
                          deep skies of lapis lazuli!

Copyright © Romeo Naces | Year Posted 2009

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Lena Townsend Date: 3/19/2009 8:47:00 AM Beautiful... Lapis is such a deep shade of blue... this line brings so much depth to this write. It is indicative of the depth of the writers soul. I love the vivid image this piece created in my mind. It brings back memories of laying back on the lawn as a child and picking out shapes and pictures in the painted skies above. Lovely write. Smiles from Lolita Login to Reply

Arany P. Date: 3/19/2009 7:00:00 AM wonderful writing... the rhyme in the end is weird but lovely... and i love the 'teases...' line its reminds school to me! ~ Arany Login to Reply

Amy Swanson Date: 3/19/2009 5:39:00 AM Beautiful with rich and lovely images! I love "deep skies of lapis lazuli", a true poet's painting written with artful words. :) Love, Amy Login to Reply

Keith Bickerstaffe Date: 3/19/2009 4:43:00 AM Well written, with fine couplet rhyming and flow... BRAVO Romeo! Best wishes, Keith Login to Reply