City Spring

Cold wind on the bay blows with a sound from the sea eucalyptus sway. Caressing fog sweeps on morning soft or cold night San Francisco spring. ****** For Abe Lopez' Favorite Season haiku contest

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Syed Amaan Ahmad

Date: 5/29/2009 1:11:00 PM

Amazing!

Edward Orozco

Date: 5/28/2009 1:31:00 AM

Beautiful choka! - jeremia

Date: 5/23/2009 4:11:00 PM

Wonderful use of imagery for a creative view. I've already read it a few times and truly enjoy it. Good one! Thank you for your kind words on my haiku. Have a wonderful weekend. Karen

Farah Chamma

Date: 5/9/2009 12:23:00 AM

That's one wonderful write... I truly love the deep sensation and imagery..take good care Sue... Always, Farah

Trudy Diane Rider

Date: 5/5/2009 11:51:00 AM

can smell the sea on the breeze, Sue. Glad you enjoyed my poem on diction and syntax... it was a poetry assignment actually and it was a lot of fun! Thanks! ~Trudy~

Raul Moreno

Date: 5/3/2009 12:28:00 AM

Beautiful work Sue, this form is more of a choka. Loved the second stanza...Raul

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/29/2009 5:37:00 PM

Sue, I've been to SF once,( '80's) went to Chinatown and bought my new-born daughter the cutest little outfit! then went to the pier, fed Sea Lions and ate clam-chowder! never been back! loved it! and love your poem!!!! fantastic! Jim