Chopped 11

I sit by the open window watching out for hubby's return.
The ancient oil lantern sways casting pools of light.
There are insects buzzing around it, they seem to be playing kamikaze.
Some pay the price as they get zapped, others seemingly to live charmed life.

As I sit waiting enjoying the night sounds, a large moth appears by the window
so close I could touch it. Then it starts its crazy yet enchanting dance.
Flitting first up and down, now going round and round.
Mottled browns and reds adorn wings of glossier like silks.

Alone like me it seems to be yet having fun drawing weird patterns.
It gets closer to the glass on each pass, a dancing dare devil of beauty.
I do not want to see it zapped, so go out and turn of the lantern.
Sitting in the old rocker chair, I gaze into the star studded sky.

And there silhouetted is my moth
 as it flies away across the moon. 
Free to live another day and night
it is joined by another as hubby arrives.

written 11/08/2014

contest: Chopped 11

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 11/10/2014 12:26:00 AM
wow, this one is DANG GOOD, Shadow. One of the best I have seen on this theme, and it is so cool how you did it in a prose like fashion. I love the story you made of it and the way you brought in the moon!
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Date: 11/8/2014 8:15:00 PM
I love this sweet story, Shadow, .... the compassion that it shows for a tiny little creature is heart-felt. PS......I am sending a soupmail for you !!!
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Date: 11/9/2014 8:04:00 AM
ty Carrie much appreciated especially your mail hugs
Date: 11/8/2014 6:01:00 AM
wonderful imagery Shadow I love the flow of the verse:-) good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/9/2014 8:03:00 AM
ty Jan nice to see you glad you enjoyed it hugs
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