Charisma

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SO!!! Once again I have committed the BOO-BOO, ZEE GRANDE ERROR. I wrote this for the eight word challenge poetry contest only to find out on proof reading that I only included seven words. I considered inserting the missing word but couldn't do it smoothly so......Hope you enjoy this "seven word screw-up".

Alas it was too much – the revelation that charisma has an expiration date cold discomfort of the scalpel - beauty’s fate the paragon of pulchritude – deception. Lust’s blazing passion age cannot sustain yet reflection over time reveals the core of hearts all lover’s first learned to adore slow walking in a cold September rain John G. Lawless ©7/6/2018

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Lyric Man

Date: 7/12/2018 3:11:00 PM

Well done, John.. thanks for all the efforts!

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/11/2018 8:48:00 PM

Perfect as is, John:)