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Centipede Dismay -Trochee

Centipede so tiny crawls trekking on a fence hundred legs, he never falls I watch in suspense… My two feet are bad, you see, pain comes when I walk. Should I be a centipede, you would hear me squawk! *Entry for Andrea’s 7/5 Trochee contest

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/30/2012 6:46:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Andrea's "The 7/5 Trochee" contest Carolyn. Love, Carol

David Williams

Date: 5/29/2012 1:34:00 AM

Carolyn congrats on your great win..David

Deborah Burch

Date: 5/29/2012 12:03:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn!! on your win!! :-) hope all is well...you're in my thoughts and prayers...love ya, deb

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2012 12:01:00 AM

Carolyn, yours was the first funny one I think I saw on the list. And I knew right away it would be a top winner. VERY well done and congrats in my contest.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 5/28/2012 11:55:00 PM

Carolyn, Congrats on your super win! I love the fun you had with it!! Love and Blessings, Rhonda

Kathryn Collins

Date: 5/10/2012 8:47:00 AM

Lovely poem. As I gather you are seriously ill, I wish you peace. I'm so glad I found your poetry. love Kathy

Daver Austin

Date: 5/9/2012 2:05:00 PM

One hundred aching legs? Oh, my aching butt! A winner for sure dear Carolyn

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/9/2012 8:21:00 AM

excellent entry Carolyn, love the imagery here, yes a hundred aching feet would be a pain ha ha. harry

John Loving Iii

Date: 5/8/2012 2:21:00 PM

what every it is i'm sure you nailed it. we'll say a prayer for your feet.

David Williams

Date: 5/8/2012 6:59:00 AM

Carolyn great trochee, but think of the money you would spend on shoes he he he, good luck..David

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 5/7/2012 12:24:00 PM

I think your suggestion might cure the problem Carolyn, What you'd do with all those feet is anyone's guess! My imagination runs riot with some poetry and the vision is fun!

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/6/2012 2:34:00 PM

Using humor thru it all! That's my Carolyn! You wrote a powerful entry here and had me gigglin' at this scene. Love, Gwendolen

Kash Poet

Date: 5/5/2012 11:46:00 PM

nicely written Carolyn.I feel sad thinking of your problem with health.Hope you are keeping well.

Deborah Burch

Date: 5/5/2012 4:59:00 PM

:) Bitter sweet! Carolyn...! It's a funny write indeed...but sad if I think of you with a hundred feet :O and in all that pain... Best wishes for the contest and big contrats on your recent wins!!! You go girl!! :) lol love ya much, deb

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/5/2012 4:27:00 PM

Well done Carolyn, wish you luck in contest. (my feet are bad to) - oxox love Anne-Lise