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Castle On the Beach

On pink beach, with red feet - Georgia peach on hot Bahamas sand. Green eyes - yellow with sun. Warm beige flesh, lightly tanned. Towels wet and gritty - scented like coconut. Hair’s scattered and pretty. Teeny-tiny conch shells drip from ears — ebb and flow of melodious waves. Piña Colada with cherry cheers, slice of pineapple and umbrella in hurricane. Caribbean calm in the salty breeze with her fella. Her tongue peppered with a Southern drawl. These lovers, about to get dirty — pail and shovel build their castle wall. 7/12/2021 Contest: A 369 Poem Sponsor: Emile Pinet
*hurricane - type of cocktail glass Created by Emile J. Pinet. The scientist and inventor Nikola Tesla believed that the numbers 3-6- 9 held great significance, and in deference to him, the (3-6-9,) was invented. An eighteen line rhyming verse with the following rhyme scheme: (aba - cdcefe - ghgijiklk,) with a syllable count of 333, 66666, 999999999. It looks best centered.

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Date: 7/31/2021 2:26:00 PM
Lovely. Love it. Congrats and God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:26:00 PM
Thank you and God’s blessings! ~ Kim
Date: 7/31/2021 9:24:00 AM
Congratulations Kim! Your poem earned a distinguished place in my PoetrySoup contest. Very well done my friend, it was a difficult form to master, Emile.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:26:00 PM
Thank you, my friend! I love a challenge :)
Date: 7/31/2021 9:14:00 AM
Wonderful Writing. Congratulations!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/31/2021 6:25:00 PM
Thank you, Christuraj!
Date: 7/13/2021 11:34:00 PM
This is gorgeous Kim
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/14/2021 4:48:00 AM
Thank you, Caren!
Date: 7/12/2021 7:11:00 PM
Clever poetry Kim. Love the form.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/12/2021 8:08:00 PM
Thank you, Harry!
Date: 7/12/2021 11:29:00 AM
Sounds ideal Kim, vacation in the Bahamas. Went there for a day a few years ago on a cruise. Would love to go back someday. Hope you have a good week. Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/12/2021 5:11:00 PM
Thank you, Tom! Ahh memories!
Date: 7/12/2021 6:23:00 AM
Cute poem. Don't drink too many cocktails. I prefer wine. Hope your castle will not get washed away by a sudden wave. Hugs.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/12/2021 10:23:00 AM
Smiling, sweet friend! I will have an occasional cocktail but wine is my drink too! Cheers!

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