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Cast Down

CAST DOWN Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank as his heart and his love fled away. No tears but his face paper white and blank Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank. Ghost memories stream freely fast from yank shadowing sadness in wells of deep stray. Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank as his heart and his love fled away. ___________________________________________ © O. E. Guillermo 1:09pm August 31, 2014 ZEUGMA USED: his boat and his dreams sank His heart and his love fled away Sponsor Sara Kendrick Contest Name Zeugma Placed 2nd..

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/29/2014 8:45:00 AM

I could see the scene of this one..Enjoyed reading this one..Thanks so much for entering it in my contest..I am sorry that I have been so long in personally congratulating you..Sara

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/29/2014 8:54:00 AM

Its okei Sara. :) thanks for the place.. :) i didn;t expect to go that high.. :)

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/22/2014 10:05:00 AM

Congratulations on your second place win Olive. You did wonderfully on this beautiful poem.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/29/2014 8:59:00 AM

thanks much Brenda.... :)

John Lawless

Date: 9/22/2014 8:25:00 AM

Well done Olive

Nicholas Miller

Date: 9/20/2014 10:19:00 AM

First time experiencing a Triolet..I think I was blessed with a good one for starts. Thanks for sharing.

Nicholas Miller
Date: 9/29/2014 9:11:00 AM

Thank you, I have since wrote a triolet myself. Working on punctuation and revision.(which I never do) I am going to put it in the contest! First one. You should too! your writing is lovely.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/29/2014 9:02:00 AM

thanks much Nicholas,.. :)

Edward Orozco

Date: 9/2/2014 6:01:00 PM

well done! =) - Ed

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/4/2014 7:29:00 AM

Thanks much :)

Paul Callus

Date: 9/1/2014 10:37:00 AM

Well executed triolet, Olive_eloi. I like how you chose 'cast down' instead of 'depressed'; the word 'down' goes perfectly with the sinking of boat and dreams. gl in contest. // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 9/21/2014 3:29:00 PM

Congratulations on your top placing in the contest!! Very satisfied to have you standing by my side on the podium!:)) I had a strong feeling that this could be the final outcome!:)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/2/2014 5:12:00 AM

Thanks much Paul..:) appreciate it..:) GBU

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/31/2014 5:30:00 AM

Fabulous write Olive! Triolet is a bit tricky always I find!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 9/1/2014 5:20:00 AM

Thanks much Dr.upma really appreciate your drop by..:)

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 8/31/2014 12:27:00 AM

complex format very well handled. a fine read. thank you.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 8/31/2014 12:55:00 AM

Thank you much Maurice for this comment . :) I appreciate it.. :)