Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Triolet

Cast Down

CAST DOWN

Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank
as his heart and his love fled away.
No tears but his face paper white and blank
Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank.
Ghost memories stream freely fast from yank
shadowing sadness in wells of deep stray.
Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank
as his heart and  his love fled away.

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© O. E. Guillermo
1:09pm
August 31, 2014

ZEUGMA USED: 
his boat and his dreams sank
His heart and his love fled away

Sponsor	Sara Kendrick
Contest Name	Zeugma 
Placed 2nd..

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Sara Kendrick September 29, 2014 at 8:45 AM I could see the scene of this one..Enjoyed reading this one..Thanks so much for entering it in my contest..I am sorry that I have been so long in personally congratulating you..Sara Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 29, 2014 at 8:54 AM Its okei Sara. :) thanks for the place.. :) i didn;t expect to go that high.. :)

Brenda Meier-Hans September 22, 2014 at 10:05 AM Congratulations on your second place win Olive. You did wonderfully on this beautiful poem. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 29, 2014 at 8:59 AM thanks much Brenda.... :)

John Lawless September 22, 2014 at 8:25 AM Well done Olive

Nicholas Miller September 20, 2014 at 10:19 AM First time experiencing a Triolet..I think I was blessed with a good one for starts. Thanks for sharing. Nicholas Miller September 29, 2014 at 9:11 AM Thank you, I have since wrote a triolet myself. Working on punctuation and revision.(which I never do) I am going to put it in the contest! First one. You should too! your writing is lovely. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 29, 2014 at 9:02 AM thanks much Nicholas,.. :)

Edward Orozco September 2, 2014 at 6:01 PM well done! =) - Ed Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 4, 2014 at 7:29 AM Thanks much :)

Paul Callus September 1, 2014 at 10:37 AM Well executed triolet, Olive_eloi. I like how you chose 'cast down' instead of 'depressed'; the word 'down' goes perfectly with the sinking of boat and dreams. gl in contest. // paul Paul Callus September 21, 2014 at 3:29 PM Congratulations on your top placing in the contest!! Very satisfied to have you standing by my side on the podium!:)) I had a strong feeling that this could be the final outcome!:) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 2, 2014 at 5:12 AM Thanks much Paul..:) appreciate it..:) GBU

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 31, 2014 at 5:30 AM Fabulous write Olive! Triolet is a bit tricky always I find! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser September 1, 2014 at 5:20 AM Thanks much Dr.upma really appreciate your drop by..:)

Maurice Yvonne August 31, 2014 at 12:27 AM complex format very well handled. a fine read. thank you. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 31, 2014 at 12:55 AM Thank you much Maurice for this comment . :) I appreciate it.. :)