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Cast Down

CAST DOWN

Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank
as his heart and his love fled away.
No tears but his face paper white and blank
Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank.
Ghost memories stream freely fast from yank
shadowing sadness in wells of deep stray.
Cast down, his boat and his dreams sank
as his heart and  his love fled away.

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© O. E. Guillermo
1:09pm
August 31, 2014

ZEUGMA USED: 
his boat and his dreams sank
His heart and his love fled away

Sponsor	Sara Kendrick
Contest Name	Zeugma 
Placed 2nd..

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Sara Kendrick Date: 9/29/2014 8:45:00 AM I could see the scene of this one..Enjoyed reading this one..Thanks so much for entering it in my contest..I am sorry that I have been so long in personally congratulating you..Sara Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/29/2014 8:54:00 AM Its okei Sara. :) thanks for the place.. :) i didn;t expect to go that high.. :)

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/22/2014 10:05:00 AM Congratulations on your second place win Olive. You did wonderfully on this beautiful poem. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/29/2014 8:59:00 AM thanks much Brenda.... :)

John Lawless Date: 9/22/2014 8:25:00 AM Well done Olive Login to Reply

Nicholas Miller Date: 9/20/2014 10:19:00 AM First time experiencing a Triolet..I think I was blessed with a good one for starts. Thanks for sharing. Login to Reply Nicholas Miller Date: 9/29/2014 9:11:00 AM Thank you, I have since wrote a triolet myself. Working on punctuation and revision.(which I never do) I am going to put it in the contest! First one. You should too! your writing is lovely. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/29/2014 9:02:00 AM thanks much Nicholas,.. :)

Edward Orozco Date: 9/2/2014 6:01:00 PM well done! =) - Ed Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/4/2014 7:29:00 AM Thanks much :)

Paul Callus Date: 9/1/2014 10:37:00 AM Well executed triolet, Olive_eloi. I like how you chose 'cast down' instead of 'depressed'; the word 'down' goes perfectly with the sinking of boat and dreams. gl in contest. // paul Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 9/21/2014 3:29:00 PM Congratulations on your top placing in the contest!! Very satisfied to have you standing by my side on the podium!:)) I had a strong feeling that this could be the final outcome!:) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/2/2014 5:12:00 AM Thanks much Paul..:) appreciate it..:) GBU

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 8/31/2014 5:30:00 AM Fabulous write Olive! Triolet is a bit tricky always I find! Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 9/1/2014 5:20:00 AM Thanks much Dr.upma really appreciate your drop by..:)

Maurice Yvonne Date: 8/31/2014 12:27:00 AM complex format very well handled. a fine read. thank you. Login to Reply Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 8/31/2014 12:55:00 AM Thank you much Maurice for this comment . :) I appreciate it.. :)