Just That Archaic Poet Poet Rhyme

Carry Grief As a Shield

Release relief, however brief-
Let it come to crush my grief!
I can't go on when Hope is gone;
Biting Life with softened teeth
Why ponder things that make no sense,
Why take my Mind to clean and rinse;
To wash away a long decay
(And left with no defense)

* "Grief" contest entry

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Robin Davis November 21, 2013 at 6:02 PM Chan The Man I can feel the grief in this poem from beginning to end. You captured how grief can affect us in many ways. Nice job my friend Thanks for the insightful and nice comment on my Devil Games. poem Just That Archaic Poet November 22, 2013 at 4:50 AM Thanks, Sweet Pea; I appreciate the read and review <3

Skat A October 4, 2013 at 9:17 PM nice win..........SKAT Just That Archaic Poet October 5, 2013 at 6:23 AM Thanks, hon! :)

Kelly Deschler October 2, 2013 at 2:36 PM "Why ponder things that make no sense"... I couldn't agree more! I love that line and the entire poem! Terrific work, BP! :) Congratulations on your win! Just That Archaic Poet October 3, 2013 at 3:26 AM Thanks, SP! Congrats on BOTH your wins; that's awesome :D

Sandra Adams October 2, 2013 at 8:26 AM finely penned poem, congrats on your win :) Just That Archaic Poet October 2, 2013 at 8:46 AM Thanks, Sanda; I appreciate it :)

Dr.Ram Mehta October 2, 2013 at 4:56 AM Congrats on the win in the contest, Just That Archaic Poet October 2, 2013 at 5:25 AM Thanks for letting me know I placed, Doc, and thanks for the comment! :)

Jon A Cavanaugh September 13, 2013 at 11:45 AM I been reading several of your recent poems. They are all wonderful. You are a very talented poet. Just That Archaic Poet September 13, 2013 at 11:55 AM Thank you again, Jon. These are all very old pieces that I happened upon while I was plundering the attic looking for an old VHS tape. I didn't even remember writing them. I'm happy you enjoy my work :)

Karen Anglesey September 12, 2013 at 8:41 PM If this is one of the older pieces you talked about, it shines just like the rest. Great from beginning to end. "Release relief, however brief, Let it come to crush my grief! " ALL fantastic lines Just That Archaic Poet September 13, 2013 at 10:04 AM It is one of my lost children from ages ago. I think the first four lines are good, but the last four I think are a little weaker. I really should have reworked it some. Line 5 is somewhat trite sounding and brings down the quality, I think. But something compelled me to post "as is" lol ;)

Wayne Hill September 12, 2013 at 2:43 PM A very clever use of words......I see greatness here. Just That Archaic Poet September 12, 2013 at 3:25 PM I am deeply flattered, Wayne. Thank you for taking time to read and reply; I very much appreciate it :)