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7/29/2025 for Carnival Nights Poetry Contest sponsored by Robert James Liguori

It was nineteen-eighty and I felt great - off to the carnival with Brenda on a date. Am I really going out with this beauty? Showing her a good time - that was my duty. Under the stars, on the intramural field, her excitement for the rides was unconcealed. The stars and lights flashed in her pretty eyes - it was like fireworks exploding in the skies, but I was looking at a lot more than that - and was hoping for more than rides and a chat. For her fun was a ride on a Ferris wheel, but I was all wrapped up in her sex appeal. We were together, but on a different page, The rides scared me - upside down in a cage! My goodness, that was forty-five years ago. I wish I could have shared her experience, though. And that was my first and last date with Brenda, a boy and a girl with a different agenda.

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Date: 7/31/2025 11:19:00 AM
A skillfully-written, entertaining message about the differences in the intentions of young males and young females, David! :-) Janice
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Date: 7/30/2025 8:56:00 PM
As you see, honesty gets one nowhere. lol.
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David Crandall
Date: 7/31/2025 8:58:00 AM
So true!
Date: 7/30/2025 8:49:00 AM
I was ok on them when young but the older I got the more fearful I got, no idea why. Your date started well. Least you wasn't sick when upside down in a cage lol. Good luck in the contest David.
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David Crandall
Date: 7/30/2025 6:14:00 PM
Thanks, Emelia, It's a real memory - she was a nice girl, but she got stuck on a date with a chicken!
Date: 7/30/2025 2:22:00 AM
- A date that didn't end well, David - No carousels for me either... I'm getting sick and green :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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David Crandall
Date: 7/30/2025 6:14:00 PM
haha - yup - thanks Anne-Lise, luckily, no one asks me to go on those rides anymore! :-))
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David Crandall
Date: 7/30/2025 6:13:00 PM
haha - yup - thanks Anne-Lise, luckily, no one asks me to go on those rides anymore! :-))

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