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Cardboard Ceiling

After you left, I 
Found my pride crouching inside
A homeless man’s box

I crawled inside and 
Collapsed, releasing the last
Of love’s butterflies


8/5/11

Susan Burch

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Carol Sunshine Brown

October 21, 2011 at 7:05 AM

Congratulations on your win in P.D.'s "any old butterfly poem" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Bob Quigley

October 15, 2011 at 11:11 PM

Congratulations on your HM Susan

Poet Destroyer A

October 15, 2011 at 8:31 PM

Susan ~, CONGRATULATIONS~ and thank you for your wonderful H.M.. in my butterfly contest,..p.d.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

October 15, 2011 at 8:06 PM

Congrats Susan on HM with these lovely lines of butterfly poetry luv..

Andrea Dietrich

August 29, 2011 at 11:44 PM

Waiting on a new poem from you, dearie. I have like three more to post but waiting for my last one to get more reads first. I sure hope I can get around to the secrets contest. That one is a blast to read the entries.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

August 10, 2011 at 1:43 PM

What a sad write this is, Susan, but so moving-- your second senryu especially touched so much. Really like your title for this!

Lori Lucas Mcclure

August 10, 2011 at 6:36 AM

wonderful and expressive write!! enjoyed reading your poem!!!!---Lori

Jack Horne

August 8, 2011 at 12:38 PM

Sad and touching piece, Susan. Sue's leg is on the mend, thanks - she's been on sickleave for a month now, but she's getting there. And she's still waiting for the bladder op. Hope you're well : )

Zzzzz Zzzzz

August 8, 2011 at 11:15 AM

Poetic and expressive. Pride often takes a mighty tumble, but hope springs eternal. Love, Robert.

Matthew Anish

August 6, 2011 at 9:53 PM

Reminds me of the quote - I don't know from who - "Love has built its mansion in the place of excrement" Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Susan Buchel

August 6, 2011 at 9:42 PM

it got me!

Andrea Dietrich

August 5, 2011 at 8:33 PM

Ahhh, poor guy. The title of this makes me think of my daughter's bedroom ceiling when she lived at home and how it had butterflies above her head. How nice if this man could have those love's butterflies on his cardboard ceiling to give him hope!