Black Eyed Susan Poet Rhyme

Burning Embers

Shredded completely, the words of a liar
Your old love poems ignite when tossed in the fire
The blaze attacks swiftly, first singing the edges
Then blackening into ashes, all your false pledges
Your cheating on me actually did me a favor
I now have a freedom and a life I can savor
No more heeding to you and your silly demands
No dinner at 6, no house spic and span
I can sit where I want, I can laugh out loud
Without you to scold me, there’s no little black cloud
Hanging over my head, telling me what to do
No “hurry up stupid,” or “get me my tools”
For I have an inner strength that you didn’t know
A flowerbed of dreams that I plan to sow -
I’m done with your critical analysis
I’m a flaming red poppy, reaching for the sun’s kiss...


2/5/13
Black Eyed Susan
For Gail's "Burning Embers" contest

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Rhonda Johnson-Saunders November 19, 2014 at 8:18 PM Brilliant! I always come back to read your work, Susan. You are such a talented writer. I hope you'll be posting again soon. Hugs, Rhonda

Benjamin Jesse November 12, 2013 at 2:43 AM weldone Susan...lemme read it again before i say more

Karen Anglesey April 21, 2013 at 6:54 PM Brilliant metaphor and captivating allo the way through

Rockman Pritts April 21, 2013 at 1:02 AM Check your soup mail. I have other comments than the one below. :-)

Bernard Colasurdo April 20, 2013 at 8:40 PM There's a beautiful feeling of Freedom and growth that is palpable in this write. really enjoyed this Susan.

Dinda Minardi April 6, 2013 at 7:36 AM Wow, I loved how you framed his bleak words of liar ignite in fire.. Actually I loved every line! Belated congrats :)

Rockman Pritts March 27, 2013 at 12:59 AM That was most excellent. I've read other pomes that were contest entries of yours, but this one was great. You certainly have an insight to passion. All I can say is, "Well done". Rockman

Connie Gildersleeve March 7, 2013 at 2:01 AM Congrats on your win. Nicely done. Connie

Poet Destroyer A March 6, 2013 at 9:54 PM SUSAN, ;-) congratulations with your sweet and awesome win, in my any poem goes contest. Good Night~ LINDA

Jack Horne February 23, 2013 at 12:03 PM Thanks, Susan - loved the contest. Yes, I agree with everything Andrea said below - such a powerful ending

Andrea Dietrich February 22, 2013 at 5:51 PM REading it for a third time. My mind is not young any more for me to ever forget this powerful poem. It was really good, Susan. I especially loved the way you ended it with the red poppy reaching for the sun's kiss. For me, endings are SO important in a poem ,and I know you feel that way too.

Jon A Cavanaugh February 19, 2013 at 10:18 PM A flaming red poppy burning up the dross in her life. Excellent!

Jack Horne February 14, 2013 at 1:29 PM love this positive write, Susan

Audrey Haick February 13, 2013 at 3:40 PM Well said! The last line is a "killer" for sure! Best wishes for the contest!Always, Annalise

... Gigno February 8, 2013 at 10:43 PM !!!

Painted Hunter February 8, 2013 at 12:50 PM Burn baby burn! I agree with Andrea...that flaming red poppy line is killer.

Andrea Dietrich February 7, 2013 at 6:44 PM rereading this one. JOe should be walking in at any moment. I sure love that red poppy image at the end!

Sara Kendrick February 7, 2013 at 7:02 AM Great work that is expressive and emotive..I hope written from hearing others' stories and not your life's experience..Reads like winning material for the contest..Good luck ..Sara

Tim Ryerson February 7, 2013 at 4:41 AM The last line floored me, Susan...I feel the rage throughout this poem...you gotta winner, I think...And in honor of your fottle comment...'I bought a new sailboat, so when the weather warms up a bit you wanna go: Cruisin', Susan?'

Poet Destroyer A February 6, 2013 at 3:18 PM Hey Susan, wow... maybe I should enter my own poem in her contest... and change all my work... good entry... awesome ending... PD

Andrea Dietrich February 6, 2013 at 3:07 PM wow, Susan, you did a great job with this topic! It's awesome to see you with a poem posted today. thanks so much also for reading some of mine today. I miss you not being here so often. Luv, Andrea

S.Jagathsimhan Nair February 6, 2013 at 2:51 PM hi Susan, it's such a nice poem, rhyming well, and spot on with its message and hope it's not about your experience!! :) Jag

Ilene Bauer February 6, 2013 at 2:43 PM this is a wonderful poem, so beautifully rhymed and so life-affirming! i love the ending and am rooting for your "flaming red poppy" - you go, girl!

Harry Horsman February 6, 2013 at 9:35 AM Oh Susan, i cant believe how fate gets it so wrong, this love cycle.. yet what wonderful poetry your emotions create, when hurt,,, love this....

Deb Wilson February 6, 2013 at 7:35 AM This is a wonderful story of the strength of a woman who's been through a lot..I really liked it..best wishes for the contest...luv,Deb