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Broken Monoku In Series

between black and white – I compromise balancing act – stiletto heels fire hot ice cold – variable menopause weather forecast hope – embers glow among the ashes pebble fast disappears – ripples take their time chicken run commotion – aborted takeoff sensationalism – penny dreadful or dime novel? ------------------------- Contest: Two Liners Sponsor: Brian Strand Placed 2nd

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Susan Ashley

Date: 1/2/2018 5:37:00 PM

Your broken monokus are imaginative and compelling Paul. I appreciate and enjoy the many textures and visuals these lines conjure up. Such variation in your intriguing thoughts and images, your lovely mind works in fascinating ways my friend :)) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 1/3/2018 1:13:00 PM

Thank you, Susan; I'm enjoying al the comments you wrote here:):) I'm also enjoying rereading my own monoku; I admit I had forgotten all about them! ~ warm regards, my friend // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 11/2/2017 5:35:00 PM

This is super Paul.This is a first time i have seen a broken monoku . reguards Darlene De B.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/4/2017 4:37:00 PM

There is a first time for everything, Darlene:) Thank you for your 'super' comment! Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/29/2017 3:22:00 PM

How clever these are, Paul. I can envision each broken monoku, especially the pebble that sinks long before the ripples disappear. That one made me feel retrospective. Best wishes in Brian's contest! Hugs, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/29/2017 4:50:00 PM

Thank you, Carolyn. I'm always jotting down monoku tidbits, simple ideas which later on I might expand into longer poems. Hugs // paul

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/27/2017 5:45:00 AM

Congratulations Paul. This would have been Top Number One, Kai

Paul Callus
Date: 3/27/2017 3:46:00 PM

You are too kind, Kai:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 3/26/2017 11:05:00 AM

Very nicely done Paul..Congrats on your win..

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2017 1:04:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. Glad you enjoyed. Regards // paul

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 3/26/2017 4:55:00 AM

Amazing lines!!! Congrats Paul, for your WIN with this fine piece!! ;-)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2017 1:02:00 PM

Your 'amazing' comment and congrats are appreciated, Teddy...thank you. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/25/2017 9:18:00 PM

These are great, Paul!! I like the visual of stiletto heels! Congrats!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2017 1:01:00 PM

I'm pleased that you enjoyed them, Kim:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Kim Merryman

Date: 3/25/2017 9:03:00 PM

Paul these are great! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2017 1:00:00 PM

Thank you, Kim. I enjoyed your winning entry, too:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/25/2017 7:52:00 PM

wowow, I had NOT seen THESE before. I really love them, Paul. I think my faves in the whole contest!!! congrats for your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2017 12:45:00 PM

You are too kind, Andrea! Thank you:) Regards // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/20/2017 8:59:00 PM

...so imaginative, each one is spot on in wit, word choice and full of smiles. Terrific writing Paul, these are GREAT! blessings and happy spring to you :-) lynn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/21/2017 5:14:00 PM

Thank you, Lynn:) I love your reaction to these short lines. Wishing you also a lovely, pleasant spring! Regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/20/2017 5:57:00 PM

oh these are all so so humourous Paul the menopause one I found especially funny:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/21/2017 4:47:00 PM

Pleased you liked them, Jan:) It was not my intention to write funny ones, but as I went along some took a funny turn! Hugs // paul