Paul Callus Poet Monoku

Broken Monoku In Series

between black and white – 
                                        I compromise

balancing act – 
                       stiletto heels

fire hot ice cold – 
               variable menopause weather forecast

hope – 
           embers glow among the ashes

pebble fast disappears – 
                                     ripples take their time

chicken run commotion – 
                                       aborted takeoff  

sensationalism – 
                          penny dreadful or dime novel?	


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Contest: Two Liners
Sponsor: Brian Strand	  
Placed 2nd

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Susan Ashley January 2, 2018 at 5:37 PM Your broken monokus are imaginative and compelling Paul. I appreciate and enjoy the many textures and visuals these lines conjure up. Such variation in your intriguing thoughts and images, your lovely mind works in fascinating ways my friend :)) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Paul Callus January 3, 2018 at 1:13 PM Thank you, Susan; I'm enjoying al the comments you wrote here:):) I'm also enjoying rereading my own monoku; I admit I had forgotten all about them! ~ warm regards, my friend // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu November 2, 2017 at 5:35 PM This is super Paul.This is a first time i have seen a broken monoku . reguards Darlene De B. Paul Callus November 4, 2017 at 4:37 PM There is a first time for everything, Darlene:) Thank you for your 'super' comment! Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire March 29, 2017 at 3:22 PM How clever these are, Paul. I can envision each broken monoku, especially the pebble that sinks long before the ripples disappear. That one made me feel retrospective. Best wishes in Brian's contest! Hugs, Carolyn Paul Callus March 29, 2017 at 4:50 PM Thank you, Carolyn. I'm always jotting down monoku tidbits, simple ideas which later on I might expand into longer poems. Hugs // paul

Kai Michael Neumann March 27, 2017 at 5:45 AM Congratulations Paul. This would have been Top Number One, Kai Paul Callus March 27, 2017 at 3:46 PM You are too kind, Kai:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Joseph May March 26, 2017 at 11:05 AM Very nicely done Paul..Congrats on your win.. Paul Callus March 26, 2017 at 1:04 PM Thank you, Joseph. Glad you enjoyed. Regards // paul

Teddy Kimathi March 26, 2017 at 4:55 AM Amazing lines!!! Congrats Paul, for your WIN with this fine piece!! ;-) Paul Callus March 26, 2017 at 1:02 PM Your 'amazing' comment and congrats are appreciated, Teddy...thank you. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues March 25, 2017 at 9:18 PM These are great, Paul!! I like the visual of stiletto heels! Congrats! Paul Callus March 26, 2017 at 1:01 PM I'm pleased that you enjoyed them, Kim:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Kim Merryman March 25, 2017 at 9:03 PM Paul these are great! Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim Paul Callus March 26, 2017 at 1:00 PM Thank you, Kim. I enjoyed your winning entry, too:) Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich March 25, 2017 at 7:52 PM wowow, I had NOT seen THESE before. I really love them, Paul. I think my faves in the whole contest!!! congrats for your win. Paul Callus March 26, 2017 at 12:45 PM You are too kind, Andrea! Thank you:) Regards // paul

Lynn Marie March 20, 2017 at 8:59 PM ...so imaginative, each one is spot on in wit, word choice and full of smiles. Terrific writing Paul, these are GREAT! blessings and happy spring to you :-) lynn Paul Callus March 21, 2017 at 5:14 PM Thank you, Lynn:) I love your reaction to these short lines. Wishing you also a lovely, pleasant spring! Regards // paul

Jan Allison March 20, 2017 at 5:57 PM oh these are all so so humourous Paul the menopause one I found especially funny:-) hugs Jan xx Paul Callus March 21, 2017 at 4:47 PM Pleased you liked them, Jan:) It was not my intention to write funny ones, but as I went along some took a funny turn! Hugs // paul