Sotto Poet Poet Other

Bright Lies and Silent Cries

Written: January 12, 2025, For contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Colored earth 
     lies in fragmented bits
          gold and silver
               just out of reach
                      acid obsessions,
                            our souls leach.
Transience of fame     
       ephemerality of 
             human existence
                 provoke a
                      poignant admission~ 
                             of forgetfulness. . .

Endless craving 
      leads to fits
           we desire what
                  lies beyond the glass
                        crystalline dreams 
                                  soon turn to brass.
This underscores
      transient nature 
          of personal memory 
               & impact beyond lifetime
                    intensifying emotional weight 
                           it declares universal truth 
                                  of inevitable fading 
                                        & human goals significance.

Out of reach 
   is cold glitz
       gems sparkle 
           with deceiving light
                  while riches 
                        bear to flight
Dreadful dinotherium—
    a world of awe,
         indented as a saw
            it could hardly fail     
                or poorly  flail
                     when we slid
                           and tumbled
                                 
Fossils emerge;
we were born to walk — 
 stay close; never stray~

Mining delusions 
   uncovers depths
      into gloom, 
          our hopes fall
               chains of rescue 
                    remain beyond recall
                       Lost in searching
                           our wits
                                 blind us to love 
                                      by our side,
                                          treasures 
                                               magnified

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Andrea Dietrich January 15, 2025 at 1:06 PM Lots of excellent imagery in your profound poetry here, Sotto. I bet this one does very well in the contest.

Michael Tor January 13, 2025 at 5:32 PM Lasaad your Poetry intellect is like a few here, exceptional my friend. Metaphors that are unique in sending a very thoughtful message to the reader. Repeatedly you are able to construct them and convey your thoughts. You take us through meaningless wants humans desire, not realizing our God given life to be treasured. Excellent my friend as always your unique and impressive Poetry is always appreciated by this reader. God bless you and your family...

Duke Beaufort January 13, 2025 at 8:59 AM SP I do like how you describe all the failures of human craving. You even develop and ozymandius-like theme about "inevitable fading." Indeed the true treasure we have is life itself and the "love by our side." Hopefully, we can celebrate that and be satisfied! BTW, who would possibly want to surround themselves with dreams turned to brass? Someone comes to mind and it reflects the worst part of our corrosive culture. Hope you are well, sir! You are wise and incredibly intelligent.

Ink Empress January 13, 2025 at 7:51 AM Dear dr sotto, firstly i love the arrangement of lines throughout this poem, so creative and simple lines that convey so much here in this poem makes this a deeply meaningful one that flows just effortlessly! So much depth in your words and i especially loved the lines "gems sparkle with deceiving light while riches bear to flight Dreadful dinotherium— a world of awe," they convey so much in such an intriguing manner. Made me pause and ponder! An excellent and very philosophical poem! Love the descriptive diction and use of words! Pleasure reading you today! Sending you light always

Arthur Vaso January 12, 2025 at 10:07 PM Now this is a philosophical poem, one has to read many times to ponder the multiple meanings.

Paige Hind January 12, 2025 at 7:29 PM I love love love this. "we desire what lies beyond the glass crystalline dreams soon turn to brass."...."Dreadful dinotherium— a world of awe, indented as a saw"...need I say more? :)