Bukang Liwayway Poet Rhyme

Breeze of Loneliness

Sitting alone in a quite park,
Feeling blue for the day turns dark,
It’s like my life becomes black and white,
Eyes looks weary it’s not as alive and bright.

Hearing the sounds of birds,
Flying softly in the cloudy skies.
Want to reach out and be with them,
Free to explore and free from my pain.

The cold breeze of air hit my skin.
Because I’m wearing a shirt that is too thin,
Freezing my body and my emotion,
Loneliness in me resides with the biggest portion.

A breeze ruffled the leaves to ease my pain,
Loneliness engulfs my being and who’s to blame?
Pretending to be strong when my heart is broken.
Where are you my love, is it really the end?



January 15, 2013

3rd Place Winner
For Frank's "Loneliness Contest"

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Poet Destroyer A April 4, 2015 at 9:33 PM Maria, Thank you for the sweet reply to my comment. Love LINDA

Nathan D. January 29, 2015 at 2:04 AM what a great expression of loneliness and a touch of longing. always important to have since they go hand in hand. good luck in contest Bukang Liwayway April 2, 2015 at 10:46 PM thanks friend Nathan ;)

Gordon Mcconnell September 7, 2014 at 10:15 AM great write Maria, really so well penned, nice flow and rhyme, God bless, Gordon Bukang Liwayway January 13, 2018 at 9:17 AM thanks friend Gordon. Good day.

Poet Destroyer A March 7, 2014 at 12:02 AM Hello Lovely Maria, a beautiful poem you paint. I'm glad you got a place in Frank's contest... He's got awesome taste..... xox~ Linda Bukang Liwayway April 2, 2015 at 10:48 PM thanks Dear PD ;) Have a blessed Holy Week

Len Gasun February 28, 2014 at 7:07 AM A beautifully sad poem my dear friend. I love it so much and so enjoyed this evening. Sorry for being late & for almost missing to read this one. Super duper busy. Whew! Have to prepare again for next camp this wk. By the way, biggest congratulations on your win! Big hugs! love lots, Leonora

Andrea Dietrich February 26, 2014 at 1:35 AM I love how you captured the feeling of loneliness here. And I see you captured a high placement. BIG congrats to you.

Chuck Melugin February 24, 2014 at 9:14 AM Dear Maria, Loneliness well written! 7 my best, chuck

Aiyah Torres February 24, 2014 at 7:16 AM i was drowned with the loneliness your poem does portait...Maria..this so heart felt!!! .. :'(( ..thank you for the visit as well! ..^__^ ...SMILE!! :0)

David Williams February 24, 2014 at 7:08 AM Maria the twist at the end was unexpected and sad because the poem has some very good images, I like it....David

Nette Onclaud February 24, 2014 at 5:52 AM awhh, a pleasure to read this again, paz.. full of longing, full of mellow artwords so defining.. hope bkk is more sober now.. huggs

Nette Onclaud January 24, 2014 at 2:31 PM love the end line; how deep, paz... cheers on your fine win!

Dr.Ram Mehta January 23, 2014 at 8:18 PM Enjoyed the write on loneliness and congrats on the fine win, Maria

Anne-Lise Andresen January 22, 2014 at 1:26 PM A touching and beautiful poem Maria - Happiness is great when you have one to share your life with - Everyone needs love .... all searching for love. - A really well written poem, greatly appreciate this poem, dear friend. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)