Breathes of Evening

Color of life , O breath of evening! 
Thou are roving in the meadow;
Reddish reddish leaves are shivering:
Under mighty windy shadow

O the yard that dipped in showers! 
In the shades of hazy bowers;

Meadows thou art rustling, waving! 
With thy daisies, lilies
myrtles?,
Singing cuckoos in a craving:
While naughty wind there whistles;

Bubbles winking in the rivulet
Put they question, what is life? 
Hazy beeches  whispered murmured :
Life is nothing but strife;

Hearing it the bubbles vanished
Was it life that they cherished? 

It is evening, shadows listen! 
Night of life therest reaching 
All of us in dust of channels
Withering suffering, coming going

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Date: 12/6/2024 8:20:00 PM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
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Date: 7/6/2024 11:46:00 AM
Miss your awesome poetry. Hope you're okay
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Date: 9/22/2023 4:16:00 AM
This sweet poem drifts over the readers life, Sabahat, love it! Original lines accentuate struggles we all abide, well done! jimbo
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Date: 9/4/2023 12:07:00 PM
Withering, suffering, coming, going. Like the leaves we fade and die. We are most beautiful just before passing. I really think you could one up your poetry Sabahat if you left of the old English. You have a nice way with words, but mixing the old and new feels awkward. I say this as a friendly critique. Try it on your next one
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Date: 9/6/2023 6:01:00 AM
Thanks Tom Woody for your beauteous suggestion, I will try to leave the use of archaic words
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