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Blue

As the shadows flee, my dear, you have me sighing, but into the sea the sun I can see dying. You are so carefree. Please don’t let me be crying. Yes, it now is night, and nothing feels right. “Goodbye,” you say. That’s a slight, for with all my might I try to keep you in sight. Though sweet words you write, you lie! You say I’m your all, then put up a wall. It’s true! And always I crawl like a wind-up doll. I’m blue. You make me feel small, yet I fall and fall for you. March 21, 2023 I thought I was writing a virelei but was informed this is not one, so I want to submit this to 'A BRIAN STRAND PREMIERE no 1202' Poetry Contest because I still look at it as a rhymed poem with a clear pattern of stanzas!

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Date: 5/29/2023 2:35:00 AM
Wonderful writing. Even if it is wrong, it is great. God bless you. Love, Gina
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Date: 3/22/2023 12:18:00 AM
a moving drama, love can disrupt the heart., thanks yann
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Date: 3/21/2023 7:40:00 AM
Good poem, Andrea! Not easy, for sure, but you handled it well. Well done. - john
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John Oldham
Date: 3/21/2023 1:42:00 PM
S'ok. I still liked the craftery :)
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 3/21/2023 1:06:00 PM
I did it wrong, so do not use my example, john!

Book: Shattered Sighs