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blood rushes threw his veins

As I sit next to him I cant help but to see his veins Blood running thick within them I look and smile He starts to fall into an endless sleep, all that's left is his remains His body is full of empty veins as long as a mile

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 3/10/2011 6:24:00 PM
ummm i used it in a totally different meaning...
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Date: 3/10/2011 5:03:00 AM
just one change.....the title says threw...it shud be through
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Date: 3/7/2011 10:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved poetry being featured on PoetrySoup this weekAshley . Love, Carol
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Date: 1/18/2011 8:11:00 PM
it's a good start. T. S.
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Date: 12/15/2010 8:36:00 AM
welcome to the site! continue to write.
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Date: 12/14/2010 4:46:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Ashley. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. You can look to the left side of the main page and find lots of information on PoetrySoup including contests by members of PoetrySoup and contests by the PoetrySoup site also. Love, Carol
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