Bliss

*Cinquain challenge from Carol Brown Bliss feels great to dream about when something is missing hope

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Date: 10/14/2010 6:41:00 PM

Much captured in just five lines. Always good to end with hope. Nice answer to the challenge. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us and for your kind words on my poem. Karen

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 12/3/2009 4:39:00 AM

Beautifully written cinquain, short and sweet!

Veronica Joseph

Date: 9/23/2009 12:28:00 PM

bliss is found moment by moments during excellent sex. and then, in the afterglow.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/21/2009 4:14:00 PM

hmmmmm, have you ever reached a bliss state? Light & Love

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/16/2009 8:05:00 PM

nicely done

Date: 9/14/2009 4:48:00 PM

Like the hope at the end. Much said in just five lines. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us.

Jay Loveless

Date: 9/14/2009 11:23:00 AM

I Love This Yoni. Missing Hope....It Makes Me Want To Write. . . Ps Thank You For The Comments. I Let On For You And Sara Together...Im Glad You Liked It =) Luv Always Booboo

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/14/2009 10:21:00 AM

bliss state is great yet I can hold it but a second.......Light & Love!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/13/2009 4:07:00 AM

We all need to dream about bliss. Nicely done. Keep writing. Sara

Sue Mason

Date: 9/11/2009 9:19:00 AM

Great response to the challenge, Yoni ... what fun is PoetrySoup !!

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 9/11/2009 7:15:00 AM

I love this bliss-Celene

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/10/2009 10:44:00 PM

this is so true Yoni..excellent

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/10/2009 8:04:00 PM

Per your comments, no one filled with bliss could be considered a "negative Nancy." Got a good laugh from the comment, though I understand the comparison of flying too high near the sun. Love you! Carolyn

James Marshall Goff

Date: 9/10/2009 6:44:00 PM

artistry in close form! Yoni!...jim

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/10/2009 6:44:00 PM

I love the way this brings a positive ending! Nicely done! ~ Carrie

John Freeman

Date: 9/10/2009 6:39:00 PM

Nicely done maestro! And thanks so much for your comments. It is said of wisdom, that when one can find humor in his own shortcomings, he knows where to find truth. "his own heart", Smile, Sincerely John Moses

Date: 9/10/2009 3:41:00 PM

Keep that hope coming. What an uplifting view in this poem. Blessings to you for sharing it. Karen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/10/2009 1:08:00 PM

True words as ever from our "intense" young poet! Too bad some only find bliss when they dream. Your clever mind explodes with creativity and now I must study the cinquain form and attempt to meet the challenge. Thanks for the tag, Yoni. This should be fun and I can use some today. I'm tired of hauling boxes and unpacking. Ready to research the cinquain and respond shortly. Love you, Carolyn

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/10/2009 10:32:00 AM

Nicely done. Great messsage in a few short lines. Keep writing. Sara