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---Blasted Cherries

blasted cherries
splatter the pavement bird dropping…
bloody tell trails

adventuredepressionintrospectionlifenaturesenryu

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Deirdre Omaidin

January 24, 2011 at 5:02 AM

Fantastic third line in this senryu, love it Déirdre

Kevin Semeniuk

January 23, 2011 at 8:24 PM

what a great way to look at something! there is poetry in every aspect of life. life is poetry.

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

January 23, 2011 at 10:11 AM

This haiku just seems so alive & visual for me, Debbie :) wonderful choice of words -- enjoyed reading this :) --hugs nikko :)

Debbie Guzzi

January 23, 2011 at 9:10 AM

15 syllables yes, the modern way to write a haiku is NOT to focus overly on the syllable count, simply UNDER 17 and short long short....

Gert W. Knop

January 23, 2011 at 7:26 AM

Enjoyed reading your Haiku, Debbie! And thank you for your kind comments! Only the second line is a bit too long. an first and last line too short. Have a great week ahead!...Love, Gert

Sara Kendrick

January 22, 2011 at 6:23 AM

At least in the rural areas it falls onto earth and brings forth some weed or tree...Great descriptive and expressive work..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

January 21, 2011 at 6:34 PM

thankxx for your nice comment and yes I luv dogs quite a lot... nice Senryu .. good luck if for the contest...

Carol Sunshine Brown

January 21, 2011 at 6:23 AM

Thank you for sharing your wonderful poetry with us Deborah. I enjoyed reading it today. May you have a wonderful weekend and always find inspiration to continue your writing. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol

Nette Onclaud

January 21, 2011 at 1:34 AM

bolting is the word, deb lights!! a stunning artwork with words..ripe for the winners' list! :) huggs, nette

Andrea Dietrich

January 20, 2011 at 3:53 PM

Deb, I can really relate to this. I had a tree that dropped so many horrible plums, it was very annoying. This would have been a riot if you'd had the cherries covering dead ants or something. Hearts bleeding for bloody ants. haha. I enjoyed this. Andrea