Blackened Silhouettes Fill the Skies

On a hot and sleepless summer night,
     Blackened silhouettes fill the skies,
 It was blackbirds on their midnight flight;
    In a chilling apocalyptic scene
       They haunted the night with their cawing cries
    The flap of their wings was like a thunder machine 
 Their numbers seemed endless, but just before dawn,
    Before the sun did rise
 The scary ebony mass was gone,
    But they live on, in a nightmare that never dies!
                                    -
 6-9-18
 Rhyme Time 4- 10 Lines Contest
 Sponsor: Laura Loo
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Roper Avatar
June 30, 2018 at 11:18 AM
Congratulations, Joseph, on your great 2nd place win.. Lovely poem and fantastic imagery ...Hugs Eve ~`*
Barden Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 9:50 PM
Love the dark edge to this! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Joseph - blessings and best wishes for continued success, my friend! :-)
Gentry Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 6:18 PM
Congratulations on your win with this well-written creative poem for your theme. A tad dark... :)
Fisher Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 7:56 AM
Back to say congratulations!
Scars Avatar
June 29, 2018 at 7:02 AM
great last line dear Joseph, really enjoyed the depth of your poem...thank you for your entry and congratulations on your placement. Be blessed, -luloo :)
May Avatar
June 30, 2018 at 6:12 AM
Be blessed Luloo..Thank you for my placement
Warrior Avatar
June 11, 2018 at 10:39 AM
Excellent depiction of the theme Joseph...best of luck my friend...love & light...^WW^
Pandit Avatar
June 11, 2018 at 6:59 AM
The imagery in your poem delivers your message..well crafted.. true to your theme you end it well, Joseph.. with these words..But they live on, in a nightmare that never dies!
Dietrich Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 6:34 PM
wow, you went very dark with this and it has that Poe feeling to it. VEry well done, JOseph!
Fisher Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 4:43 PM
Joseph, I really enjoyed your poem. Your choice of words created a detailed picture in my mind, as well as the sounds of the blackbirds. I like the dark mood created. Haley
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June 10, 2018 at 3:26 PM
i like the brooding tone of your work, joseph... grreat job!...huggs
Vaso Avatar
June 10, 2018 at 12:22 AM
Very dark and Gothic, love this style!
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June 9, 2018 at 1:02 PM
- Sounds like "black birds who warn death", Joseph - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Sands Avatar
June 9, 2018 at 12:11 PM
Wow that is haunting Joseph. Well done :)
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