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Blackened Silhouettes Fill the Skies

On a hot and sleepless summer night, Blackened silhouettes fill the skies, It was blackbirds on their midnight flight; In a chilling apocalyptic scene They haunted the night with their cawing cries The flap of their wings was like a thunder machine Their numbers seemed endless, but just before dawn, Before the sun did rise The scary ebony mass was gone, But they live on, in a nightmare that never dies! - 6-9-18 Rhyme Time 4- 10 Lines Contest Sponsor: Laura Loo

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Date: 6/30/2018 11:18:00 AM
Congratulations, Joseph, on your great 2nd place win.. Lovely poem and fantastic imagery ...Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 6/29/2018 9:50:00 PM
Love the dark edge to this! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Joseph - blessings and best wishes for continued success, my friend! :-)
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Date: 6/29/2018 6:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this well-written creative poem for your theme. A tad dark... :)
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Date: 6/29/2018 7:56:00 AM
Back to say congratulations!
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Date: 6/29/2018 7:02:00 AM
great last line dear Joseph, really enjoyed the depth of your poem...thank you for your entry and congratulations on your placement. Be blessed, -luloo :)
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Date: 6/30/2018 6:12:00 AM
Be blessed Luloo..Thank you for my placement
Date: 6/11/2018 10:39:00 AM
Excellent depiction of the theme Joseph...best of luck my friend...love & light...^WW^
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Date: 6/11/2018 6:59:00 AM
The imagery in your poem delivers your message..well crafted.. true to your theme you end it well, Joseph.. with these words..But they live on, in a nightmare that never dies!
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Date: 6/10/2018 6:34:00 PM
wow, you went very dark with this and it has that Poe feeling to it. VEry well done, JOseph!
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Date: 6/10/2018 4:43:00 PM
Joseph, I really enjoyed your poem. Your choice of words created a detailed picture in my mind, as well as the sounds of the blackbirds. I like the dark mood created. Haley
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Date: 6/10/2018 3:26:00 PM
i like the brooding tone of your work, joseph... grreat job!...huggs
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Date: 6/10/2018 12:22:00 AM
Very dark and Gothic, love this style!
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Date: 6/9/2018 1:02:00 PM
- Sounds like "black birds who warn death", Joseph - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/9/2018 12:11:00 PM
Wow that is haunting Joseph. Well done :)
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