Laura Breidenthal Poet Rhyme

Black Roses

This was originally a song...now most of the words are lost in time...
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You were
Always
So ALIVE

It hurts
So bad
To have to see you die

I watch them
Put you into the ground
We all stare in suspense,
Quiet, no sound

I set
Black roses
On your stone
Now I stand
Alone

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Cherl Dunn November 16, 2013 at 4:30 PM One is never really alone if you keep the one you've lost alive in your heart of hearts, one day the black rose for which you've laid, live turn a crimson red again and live. but you'll never forget my friend that black rose plainted deeply within your soul. cheri beautiful write above. and thank you for your comments

David William Breidenthal May 17, 2012 at 4:44 PM BEAUTY fills this poem! :) Good job, sis. Remember rest of it plz. I needah go to drama...oh no!

Suzanne C. Goudreau May 16, 2012 at 5:28 PM Sad and very moving. Life is short lived isn't it? Many blessings going your way and May God Bless!

Lisa Cooper May 16, 2012 at 1:27 PM great work laura!

Jack Horne May 15, 2012 at 11:14 AM beautiful words, Laura. It would make a great song

Harry Horsman May 14, 2012 at 12:47 AM so profound Laura, wonderful to read. harry

Sara Kendrick May 12, 2012 at 8:17 AM That must have been an interesting tune..Enjoyed reading this morn..Thanks for stopping by..Your presence at my work is uplifting..Sara

John Rhinem May 12, 2012 at 1:30 AM Ps. Smile ˜ Thanks Again For The Kind Visit * Love, John!:) ˜

Daver Austin May 10, 2012 at 3:22 PM A very dark elegy. Enjoyed. daver

Andrea Dietrich May 9, 2012 at 3:58 PM It's sad, laura. Are there really black roses? A most fitting symbol of death!

M. Hussain Effendi May 8, 2012 at 11:24 PM I do not have words to express my feelings after having read this, dear Laura. Thank you for sharing.

Elizabeth Wesley May 8, 2012 at 5:38 PM Lost love Laura? It is sad these funerals but I guess last rites help with closure. Nice poem you wrote.

John Rhinem May 8, 2012 at 10:08 AM Smile ˜ Unless A Seed Falls Unto the Ground & Dies, Then, It Stands Alone; But, If It Dies Then, It Produces Much Fruit * No Matter The Colour Of The Rose, My Dear Sweeet Beautiful Laura, Fragrance Still Permeats From Within The Core Of Its Creation * And Again, Shall It Die, Then, Sweeter The Perfume * My Love, Forever; John!:) ˜ May 8, 2012 at 10:33 AM ....Ps. Smile ˜ I Am Growing Weary Of Walking Through A Shadows Moment; 'Beyound The Night.'" *

Justin Debrosse May 8, 2012 at 7:50 AM This amazing, so well crafted and great delivery!

Michelle Mac Donald May 7, 2012 at 8:29 PM This was a very sorrowful song, Laura! The last four words gave me a chill! Nicely penned, Laura. Oh, btw...thanks for telling me what those two animals are! Looking at them was making my mind buzz..lol Have a great week, love, Mikki

Pace Ink-U-Script May 7, 2012 at 8:05 PM Love this piece dearly!! Muah!!

Kyle Carlson May 7, 2012 at 5:44 PM My blood blackens more and more with every poem of yours I read...not really sure what that's supposed to mean but...AMAZING. - Kyle. Back from a lonely Hiatus. HERE. WE. GO. Laura Breidenthal May 7, 2012 at 6:26 PM Haha! Thanks Kyle.