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Between the Stingers

Trust, like a pitiless whore-master, grins as between the sheets and at my breasts, he suckles. Though Cupid lauds' the joy, I feel only stings. The manic moon shivers to shriek-like violins as trusting seed is split and son-less my knees buckle mother-less street urchin blanched, impatient, sin. In sympathy the sun pales night's mood swings seeking to caress and hold with a fractured chuckle love's exhausted, and misspent, ripened lingerings To the dying day and I, cry of might-have-beens ivory white my ice hands, my bleeding knuckles Trust like a pitiless whore-master grins Though Cupid lauds' the joy, I feel only stings.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 10/23/2012 6:12:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Re-Write" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/21/2012 11:24:00 AM
An excellent write Debbie, congratulations on your win in Catie's contest. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl
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Date: 10/21/2012 8:36:00 AM
very nice poem..congratulations on your win friend Debbie. cheers!! (^_^)
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Date: 10/21/2012 6:38:00 AM
wow, love this one, Debs - congrats on all your wins : )
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Date: 10/20/2012 9:17:00 PM
Dear Lady, , congratulations with your win...pd
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Date: 10/20/2012 8:08:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Deb! hugs:)LG
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Date: 10/20/2012 12:56:00 PM
CONGRATS DEBBIE ON A TOP TEN WIN FOR THIS AMAZING RE-WRITE OF CATIE'S POEM LUV .. GREAT CHOICE .. GREAT JOB ..
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Date: 10/20/2012 12:43:00 PM
O Wow!! The Great One is at it again. A masterpiece copy of a masterpiece original!! Just Wow! Beautiful Debbie...congrats. One love, joy Wells
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Date: 10/8/2012 8:22:00 AM
Debbie - the sting of it all brings horrid tears. love, Kathy
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Date: 10/6/2012 5:39:00 PM
nicely written....line 4 is a gem
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Date: 10/6/2012 5:27:00 PM
When darkness leaves you breathless Behold I leave you venus Bright beyond your greatest wish Your gifts to us are priceless
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Date: 10/6/2012 5:16:00 PM
A very well crafted villanelle. I love your ich imagery and word selection. On my haiku, it was the iron work on my old sewing machine that caught the moonlight. Thanks for your comments.
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