Between the Stingers

Trust, like a pitiless whore-master, grins
as between the sheets and at my breasts, he suckles.
Though Cupid lauds' the joy, I feel only stings.

The manic moon shivers to shriek-like violins
as trusting seed is split and son-less my knees buckle
mother-less street urchin blanched, impatient, sin.

In sympathy the sun pales night's mood swings
seeking to caress and hold with a fractured chuckle
love's exhausted, and misspent, ripened lingerings 

To the dying day and I, cry of might-have-beens
ivory white my ice hands, my bleeding knuckles
Trust like a pitiless whore-master grins
Though Cupid lauds' the joy, I feel only stings.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Brown Avatar
October 23, 2012 at 6:12 AM
Congratulations on your win in Catie's "Re-Write" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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October 21, 2012 at 11:24 AM
An excellent write Debbie, congratulations on your win in Catie's contest. I enjoyed the read~ Caryl
Liwayway Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 8:36 AM
very nice poem..congratulations on your win friend Debbie. cheers!! (^_^)
Horne Avatar
October 21, 2012 at 6:38 AM
wow, love this one, Debs - congrats on all your wins : )
A   Avatar
October 20, 2012 at 9:17 PM
Dear Lady, , congratulations with your win...pd
Gasun Avatar
October 20, 2012 at 8:08 PM
Congratulations on your win, Deb! hugs:)LG
Sweetheart Avatar
October 20, 2012 at 12:56 PM
CONGRATS DEBBIE ON A TOP TEN WIN FOR THIS AMAZING RE-WRITE OF CATIE'S POEM LUV .. GREAT CHOICE .. GREAT JOB ..
Wellington Avatar
October 20, 2012 at 12:43 PM
O Wow!! The Great One is at it again. A masterpiece copy of a masterpiece original!! Just Wow! Beautiful Debbie...congrats. One love, joy Wells
Collins Avatar
October 8, 2012 at 8:22 AM
Debbie - the sting of it all brings horrid tears. love, Kathy
May Avatar
October 6, 2012 at 5:39 PM
nicely written....line 4 is a gem
Goff Avatar
October 6, 2012 at 5:27 PM
When darkness leaves you breathless Behold I leave you venus Bright beyond your greatest wish Your gifts to us are priceless
Grisetti Avatar
October 6, 2012 at 5:16 PM
A very well crafted villanelle. I love your ich imagery and word selection. On my haiku, it was the iron work on my old sewing machine that caught the moonlight. Thanks for your comments.
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