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Betrayal

again
she combs the woods 
through rain

pouring 
inside her heart
like sting

of glade
as damp lungs heave--
betrayed.



Contest: Whispers Of A Muse
Rora Onna
Nov 30  2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/8/2014 9:00:00 AM
Truly incredible write, Rora! Beautiful and deep images...congrats to you on a well deserved win!! Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 12/4/2014 7:04:00 PM
this one is rather mysterious!! Congrats for your fine win.
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Date: 12/3/2014 7:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this excellent write!
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Date: 12/3/2014 6:52:00 PM
Peace and God's Blessings to you and yours...These verses are like Easy listening on the radio...Soft, beautiful, melodic, a tad suspenseful, sad, and final....Very nicely composed.
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Date: 12/3/2014 11:27:00 AM
Powerful in expression and emotion. This of yours is a very deserved win; congratulations! // paul
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Date: 12/3/2014 9:57:00 AM
you took the theme to a different level, rora...melancholic and beautiful... thanks for being part of my contest with top congrats!
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Date: 12/3/2014 9:24:00 AM
very powerfully penned - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 12/3/2014 9:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Rora.
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Date: 11/30/2014 5:11:00 PM
Powerful verses! Good luck in the contest Rora! A 7 from me! :) Love and hugs! xxxx D.
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