Betrayal

Betrayal cuts like a knife Spears the heart, bleeding with pain Causing life to spin in strife Betrayal cuts like a knife Places a double edged memory in life Anger is fueled, as tears rain Betrayal cuts like a knife Spears the heart, bleeding in pain Heidi Sands 1/25/19 8 Lines ABA AAB AB Rhyme 1st, 4th and 7th lines Repeat 2nd and 8th lines repeat

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Bette Bavington

Date: 1/30/2019 12:48:00 PM

Betrayal is such a horrible thing. It has an impact on peoples lives that is so strong that some don't recovery from it. Nicely done.

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/30/2019 12:59:00 PM

You are right Bette. It is horrible with huge impact. Thank you for your comment on this :)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/29/2019 4:17:00 AM

Ah, Heidi, there is nothing I would change about this poem except one thing. I would have titled it "Betrayal cuts like a knife" because I keep seeing that over and over, and it is TRUE!

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/29/2019 4:34:00 AM

That is a good idea Caren. Thank you for taking the time to comment on my poems. It has been nice reading the comments :)

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 1/28/2019 6:00:00 AM

Betrayal is more dangerous than any other form of hurting .. it kills ... Your words express all of that pain.

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/28/2019 7:45:00 AM

Thank you for visiting this poem and commenting Swetha :) I appreciate it.

Silent One

Date: 1/26/2019 7:18:00 AM

Nothing hurts like betrayal, sad that so many do it..

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/26/2019 7:37:00 AM

You are right Silent One. Thank you for your comment :)

Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 1/25/2019 7:03:00 PM

Empowering words! An interesting type of poem, triolet.

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/25/2019 7:12:00 PM

Thank you Sandy :)

Vladislav Raven

Date: 1/25/2019 5:47:00 PM

Hi Heidi, you have used the Triolet form to great effect in this emotional write. You write with such strong emotion that the lines set my own emotions to overflow. I love the content of this write. A definite fave. Have a wonderful weekend. Hugs....Mike. XX

Heidi Sands
Date: 1/25/2019 5:51:00 PM

Thank you Mike. I am grateful for your support and enjoy your poetry very much. Have a nice weekend :)