Below Zero

I almost came close to believing that i knew him.,

yet there was more in him than i could have imagined.

We did the Hi's and the goodbyes,

yet there was a dark side in him.

It was his past.

"I fell in love with her" he said.

"Then out of the blue one day, she said she didn't love me back."

The halls were empty and they seemed to stare at us because it was

just the two of us. Unless you want to count the lockers.

There was a moment of silence.

A pause.

Before I had the chance to recap my thoughts he said,

"And then one day i shot her"

His face had no expression.

His soul seemed harder than a rock.

At the same moment ,

the earth seemed to have stopped moving

for the temperature of my heart was below zero

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 6/25/2010 2:31:00 PM
I like the essence of this below zero poem. It flows very well and has a message to tell. Welcome to Poetry Soup and keep writing. Blessings, Joseph
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Date: 6/25/2010 3:57:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup njiba. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/24/2010 10:33:00 AM
Wow,,, deep write, it hurts when they stop the loving but you have to be strong,tihis person went about it all wrong but you captured the thoughts of a love sick person well ...P.D.
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