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Bee

yellow and black buzz
                            ing yellow and black b
                            uzzi              ng yello
                            w a              nd blac
                            k bu             zzing y
                            ellow and black buzzi 
                            ng yellow and black b
                            uzz              ing yell
                            ow a            nd blac
                            k bu             zzing y
                            ellow and black buzzi
                            ng yellow and black b


                           are attracted to flowers
                           are attracted to flowers
                           are at
                           tracte
                           d to flowers
                           are attracte
                           d to f
                           lower
                           s are attracted to flowe
                           rs are attracted to flow


                          most people swat at them
                          most people swat at them
                          most p
                          eople s
                          wat at them m
                          ost people swa
                          t at t
                          hem m
                          ost people swat at them
                          most people swat at them



                                                 P.R.Deremer

Copyright © Pam Deremer | Year Posted 2015

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Brian Sambourne Date: 10/24/2020 10:04:00 AM Superb structural poem. Enjoyed the read. So creative. Brian Login to Reply

Pashang Salehi Date: 10/16/2015 4:22:00 PM Pam I did not understand all the buzz and the fuzz..... good luck Login to Reply Pam Deremer Date: 10/16/2015 4:48:00 PM It is a Haiku poem in the letters that spell BEE. The first letter repeats the short line of " Yellow and black buzzing" which is part of a picture of a bee. The next letter says "attracted to flowers." The 3rd letter says " most people swat at them." on each letter I just kept repeating the statement for that letter. If you follow each letter you will see that each word is there. Does that help?

Beautiful Scars Date: 10/6/2015 3:50:00 PM Love it! so cute! :) Login to Reply

Cherl Dunn Date: 10/5/2015 9:13:00 PM Dear Pam I adore your style and form concept, it's just a fabulous outstanding form bravo, and thanks for your comment of worry, but I'm a tough old gal not that old but right now I feel anicent, lol cheri Login to Reply

Njeri Hunjeri Date: 9/29/2015 1:53:00 PM this is so creative. i like this new style you have going on here. 7++ Login to Reply Pam Deremer Date: 9/29/2015 1:58:00 PM Thank you.

David Scott Date: 9/29/2015 11:24:00 AM unasll diffrent like your poem thankyou for your kind words on mine fate poem which is a revised version of an old write i have not been on here for last eight months so not chance to write much david scottxx Login to Reply Pam Deremer Date: 9/29/2015 12:15:00 PM Thank you for reading my work.

David Mcsorley Date: 9/29/2015 6:43:00 AM Pam that's really cool, love the way you've set it out. Thanks for the review of my poem, Dave Login to Reply Pam Deremer Date: 9/29/2015 12:14:00 PM Thank you for your comment.

Cherl Dunn Date: 9/28/2015 5:28:00 PM Dear Pam Clever and creative, love the BEE design, simply wonderful, amazing I'm going to read a few more of yours, and thanks for the review of mine also, cheri Login to Reply Pam Deremer Date: 9/28/2015 7:28:00 PM Thank you so much.

Pat Davis Date: 9/25/2015 12:21:00 AM Pam, you are so creative and amazing! Pat Login to Reply Pam Deremer Date: 9/25/2015 11:12:00 AM Thank you so much!