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// Note - this was the graduation poem I wrote for my daughter, a landscape architecture major who is also a lovely poetess // You've blessed us as you've grown from bud to blossom; Bright sunflower and signet marigold. A miracle of God, sacred and awesome - A masterpiece we joyfully behold. Now pillars of your life are rearranging, Yet sing this constant chorus, gifted gifter: Through rise and fall of tides with sandbars changing, One rock remains: God is your spirit lifter. Your life a poem of blue-eyed, sun-drenched words With meter of precise deliberation; Rich metaphors of love and singing birds - The soul-soaked sounds of sweet alliteration. Gentle of heart and generous of mien, Sing to the tempo of your heartbeat drumming. Pursue your lush landscapes and walls of green As who you are and who you are becoming. written May 2016

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Date: 4/8/2021 2:39:00 PM
John, great write , very inspirational verse, and the voice has so much meaning. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Not a contest I entered couldn't get motivated to write for it. Hugs Eve
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Date: 4/8/2021 12:14:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A lovely graduation poem. Have a blessed day...............
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Date: 4/8/2021 10:02:00 AM
John, a big CONGRATS on your well-deserved win with this lovely, moving, vividly descriptive poem! Janice
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Date: 4/8/2021 9:17:00 AM
So beautiful in melody and floral image John! This flows like a lovely lyric. I love your imagery and all of the musical references. Especially intrigued by "all the pillars of your life rearranging." Congratulations on your win dear friend! Easter blessings and joy to you from the dugout!
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Date: 4/7/2021 11:48:00 PM
Congratulations on this beautiful top placing poem. It is heartfelt and very well written. Your daughter is a blessed young lady to receive such a beautiful gift from your heart!
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Date: 3/6/2020 10:54:00 PM
This is so precious and well thought out. It's evident that it is straight from the heart.
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John Watt
Date: 3/6/2020 11:06:00 PM
Thank you, Juliet. I hope it was worthy of her significant accomplishment. ~ John
Date: 3/5/2020 6:26:00 PM
Well done John.
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John Watt
Date: 3/5/2020 6:43:00 PM
Thank Cecelia for the very nice placement and the fun contest!
Date: 3/4/2020 6:19:00 PM
What a beautiful poem for your daughter! I love the rhyming, the alliteration sprinkled throughout, and I especially love this: "Through rise and fall of tides with sandbars changing, One rock remains: God is your spirit lifter." Very very nice, John.
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Date: 3/4/2020 6:49:00 PM
So, here's a funny coincidence - her name is Becca... so nice to see you again, friend. Thank you for the lovely, uplifting comment. Hope all is well in your world ~ John
Date: 3/4/2020 4:26:00 PM
Very special. Well written :)
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John Watt
Date: 3/4/2020 6:52:00 PM
Thank you Heidi. It wasn't a nice a graduation gift as, say a car or a trip to Hawaii, but I could afford to give her a poem! ~ John
Date: 3/4/2020 3:05:00 PM
what a gorgeous special occasion poem you did, John. What I especially enjoyed was stanza two: the idea of a "gifted gifter" so sweet! and that rhyming that line with spirit lifter at end of the stanza. great images in the other stanzas as well!
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Date: 3/4/2020 6:54:00 PM
Thank you for your noticing these little aspects and commenting on them. Always appreciate your attention to those kinds of details ~ John